“What was that?” demanded Diamond Tiara.
Scootaloo shrugged. “It’s called a kiss, and no you can’t have another.”
“Why did you bucking kiss me?”
“It shut you up for a good ten minutes. Definitely worth whatever venom you spewed during it. Besides, it’s just a kiss. Mom used to use them to make that one gray mare be quiet when she ranted.”
“How could Daddy be with somepony so unprofessional?”
“Maybe he needs somepony to loosen him up.” Scootaloo turned her attention to her JoyBoy as she leveled up in Tetris.
Diamond Tiara started to respond but settled for crossing her hooves and lying down with a huff.
Sweetie Belle giggled and clapped her hooves together “Yes! I win again!”
“Consarnit! How th’ hay do ya keep doin’ that?”
Silver Spoon sighed. “Isn’t that five against each of us?”
“Yup”
“Well, you two could play each other if you want. I’m getting a bit tired of checkers.”
Apple Bloom and Silver Spoon looked to each other and sighed. “At least one of us would get to win tonight.”
“Okay, let’s set it back up.”
Sweetie Belle smiled and walked over to Scootaloo while Apple Bloom and Silver Spoon set up the next game. “What are you playing, Scoots?”
“Annoy Diamond Tiara, of course.”
“Nah, I’m playing Tetris, I like an actual challenge… and I lost. Ah well, I still managed a new personal best, so I’m happy.” Scootaloo stood and stretched a bit before looking around, taking note of the apparently very intense game of checkers and the light pink pony staring daggers at her still.
“So, what are we gonna do? We can’t just spend all night playing checkers and sitting around.”
“I dunno, this is our first sleep over with no crusading. DT, what do you and Silver usually do?”
“We talk about important things, like our strategies for running the family business, who would be the best to keep good relations with-”
“And colts?”
Sweetie Belle giggled. “Scoots, there aren’t many colts to talk about. They would have to get bored of it eventually.”
“First, no, we do not waste our time talking about colts. We’re more mature than that.”
Scootaloo smirked. “Says the filly who freaked over her first kiss less than a half an hour ago?”
“Wh-what?!”
Scootaloo shrugged. “Hey, no big deal. Like I said, a kiss is a kiss, nothing big. Just because you’re not as awesome as I am at it--”
“Are you saying I’m a bad kisser?”
“No, no, no. Not at all, sis. Not everypony can be as good as I am.”
“Ha! So you’re just saying you’re better, then?”
“Yeah, sounds about right.”
“Oh, I beg to differ.”
Scootaloo smirked, taking a moment to look around and notice that, once more, she and Diamond had managed to become the center of attention; she was starting to see the fun in it. She turned back to Diamond, a challenging smile plastered on her face. “Prove. It.”
Diamond simply stood and stared at her step-sister, whose smile seemed to get bigger by the second.
“See? You’re not brave en--”
Scootaloo’s eyes went wide as she was nearly tackled to the ground, though the thing to keep her from yelling out were the now faintly familiar lips pressed against hers. The room was silent for a moment as Scootaloo took in what had just happened. After the moment passed, she reached her forelegs around Diamond Tiara’s neck and fell with her, both of them ending up on their sides as Scootaloo closed her eyes and returned the kiss.
The kiss ended within a few minutes, though all five fillies felt as though hours could have easily passed them by before Scootaloo and Diamond Tiara pulled away, panting lightly.
“I stand corrected. You’re not half-bad.”
“I told you.”
Apple Bloom whistled. “Well, ah gotta admit, fer hatin’ each other at the start o’ this, yer sure gettin’ along well, now. Maybe a bit too well, ‘specially fer sisters.”
Scootaloo blushed a bit and stood up, brushing herself off. “So, anypony want something to drink?”
Silver Spoon and Apple Bloom shrug and turn back to their game, still only about five moves in.Diamond Tiara quickly got to her hooves herself. “I’ll help you bring them up.”
Scootaloo and Sweetie Belle looked at Diamond with an eyebrow raise, but Sweetie soon shrugged it off and turned back to watch the others continue their game. Scootaloo shrugged and started towards the kitchen again, Diamond Tiara close behind.
“Y’all think they’re gonna kiss again?”
“Definitely”
“Mhmm”
“Ya think this is gonna be a thing fer ‘em now?”
“Not sure what I think, or what I think about it.”
“I think they looked kinda cute laying with each other.”
Silver Spoon sighed. “It’s ‘lying’, Sweetie Belle.”
Sweetie Belle cocked her head. “What do you mean? What were they lying about.”
“No, I mean lying as in lying down. Laying is what you do to something, lying is something you do yourself.”
“I don’t get it.”
“Okay, so, you lie down, and you lay something down. It’s more about what’s receiving the…”
“So…”
“We’re not talking about that.”
“That’s a bit of a change of pace for you.”
“You mind telling me what that pace has been lately?”
“Besides driving me to shut you up?”
“I never made you.”
“You dared me.”
“I didn’t think you’d freaking kiss me!”
“Duh. That’s the point.”
The two reached the kitchen, Scootaloo reaching onto the counter and settling a saddlebag over her back. “Okay, that may have been clever.”
“What I’d like to know is why you kissed me.” Scootaloo walked to the cupboard and began shuffling through the drinks. “Ya know, not that I mind. It’s not like it meant anything.”
Diamond Tiara brush a hoof on the floor, her cheeks barely brighter than the rest of her. “You challenged me. What did you expect?”
Scootaloo dropped a drink into the bag and shrugged. “Honestly? I expected you to huff up and try to get me to drop it.”
“Well, I didn’t.”
“Oh, trust me, sis, I noticed.”
“Will you stop calling me that?”
“Why? We are technically sisters, now. It’s not just soon-to-be anymore. Your dad and my mom are married now.”
“We are step-sisters, and even they don’t just start kissing each other!”
Scootaloo turned with a smirk, having now filled the bags with plenty of soda for a few hours at least. She walked up to Diamond, giving her a short peck on the muzzle. “How do you know that?”
Diamond Tiara stood for a moment and blinked before shaking her head and turning to follow Scootaloo. “They don’t!”
“I’m just asking how you know.”
“Because that would be weird.”
“Would it really have been any less weird if we weren’t step-sisters?”
“... Maybe. I don’t know.”
Scootaloo stopped a short ways after reaching the top of the stairs. “Have you really ever just done something for the sake of doing it? You know, just to be silly or have fun? Maybe just to see if you really know yourself as well as you think you do?”
“Of course not. Why would I just do something stupid for no good reason?”
“Well, if you know the odds of things just not going badly are on your side, then why not?”
“Well, isn’t that what you three tried for a few years looking for your cutie marks?”
Scootaloo turned, forehoof raised and mouth open to respond, only to pause and groan. “Okay, points to you for that one, but along the way we learned a lot.”
“Like how hard and how many times you can hit the ground without breaking something?”
Scootaloo scowled at the now smirking Diamond Tiara. “You’re enjoying this, aren’t you?”
Diamond leaned in, briefly pressing her lips to Scootaloo’s before trotting into the room, a bounce in her step as she spoke with a slight sing-song tone to her voice. “We have drinks~”
Scootaloo blinked a few times, her cheeks bright red. She groaned and started back towards her room. “This is going to be a long night. If only mom didn’t count her rum…”
3811750 Then I happily await your opinion on the new chapter. Also, side stories? I never thought about that. Maybe I'll look into this phenomenon. That is all.
~CC
Rainbow Dash will never let this one down......of course she never has to know, unless Silver gets mad for revenge.
No seriously though, I enjoyed that quite a bit.
Well THAT earned a romance tag lol!
Maybe. Not sure.
Would be nice if you made it a bit more clear who was talking when you have three or more fillies speaking, considering half the time SB and SS talk the same at times between AB speaking and other two responding. Other than that, this is adorable. You are the harbinger of Scootiara. This story pleases me.
Also, I snickered at the lie vs lay joke. WHO SAYS YOU COMEDIES AREN'T EDUCATIONAL!
P.S. I did not expect this to be updated on the same day. Shame I spent a good few hours just trying to fix to notice! xD
I hadn't been expecting a continuation, but it's welcome, I think!
The bit with Sweetie and Silver getting hung up over 'lie' and 'lay' was particularly funny, I thought, if only for the fittingly foal-like silliness of it.
3814835 Well, I'm glad you enjoyed it. Hopefully I'll be able to continue it soon. If not, I'll be updating something else, so no real worries.
3815583 It was useful, and, sadly, I'm very much aware of how this was less-than-decent from a legitimate story perspective. I'll actually be writing a story that, hopefully, will be managing much better something along the lines of a serious story before much longer. I just need to finish these two stories I should get done before it, as well as get through another story that will kind of function as both a form of practice and a reference bit.
Long story short, thank you for the feedback, and I'm glad that, for the purpose of the story, I did well. It's also always nice to hear something I didn't do so well, in this case, structure for a stand-alone, as it gives me something to work on, and to fix.
This is relevant to my interests.
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More!
3816204 Can do.
3816938 So it seems.
3817286
Aw yeah!
3817324 Well, you did read the name of the second chapter, right? Not Even Sunset. This is a sleepover, you know? That means we've got a whole night of potential here.
3817337
Still. There are many other factors that can lead this to cease
3817342 Precisely! My stories now have a decent hand to play, a card for most situations. I'm prepared to pull this thing to an end the next chapter and just keep the full thing as a fun little project in my GDocs. That's for any chapter. So, I'm prepared.
3817360
Well alrighty then
3822254 Que?
3822436
Just ignore me~
You'll stay a lot more sane that way
3822444 You're worrying about my sanity. Let me clear something up, deary: Any sanity I have left is barely enough to keep my conversations and writing as cohesive as they stand now. That isn't going anywhere. It's cute that you're worried, but the next chapter in Too Generous? should ease any concerns you have that I've any sanity left to lose.
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I worry too much, silly me. I should have known sanity is a rare thing to find on the internet.
Only newcomers have it and I doubt you are one
3827509
You funny.
As a friend of the author of this fic, they asked me to come and look it over. And perhaps if you actually, you know, read the description you would have seen I stated that it was a challenging read, meaning it may be hard to understand, possibly due to large vocabulary and complex plot ideas.
I see no hypocrisy
That is all. Equestria is ours.
3827509 3827992 Both of you, feel free to have your discussion here all you like, but know that the moment it ceases being civil, I will start deleting comments. I don't mind discussion, but I expect a certain level of respect between my readers. So, just keep it civil you two. No cat fights.
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You callin' me a pussy?
That is all. Equestria is ours.
3828910 Psh, nah, I'm callin you Cowardly, and don't think I'm Lion.
Just like Telaros, I'm sometimes confused who is talking, especially at points when there's only dialogue, without any narration. Also, some transitions are a bit weird. But overall, I enjoy this story.
this.. actually makes my few criticisms of the first chapter rather insignificant.
for someone intoxicated this story is quite remarkable!
bueno.
okay first we were in the bedroom with Silver, Bloom and Sweetie all talking with little to no indication as to whom was speaking and then suddenly we switch to wherever Diamond and Scoots are with no scene change and again no indication as to whom was speaking. The only clue as to it being DT and Scoots was they were talking about kissing eachother.
I can appreciate these girls. They know good games, and good grammar.