Light has always triumphed in the face of darkness. But can our favorite heroines truly defeat an evil that is merciless and relentless in its pursuit to grow? Join your favorite ponies as they deal with a threat they've never gone against before.
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Well, this is starting great. The storytelling is indeed spine chilling, the suddenness fits the Alien mythos, etc.
However, there is one big problem: the grammar. There are a lot of grammar errors, with the one that recurs the most being an apostrophe in places such as this:
When it should look like this:
There are also missing commas, and I think a few capitalization errors.
Well i am not a great fan of the latest movies because they make the aliens look dumb, but i hope your storie make justice to this scary creature and the respect they deserve as one of the most scary aliens in science fiction
4632418 So how does the first chapter look? (Hopefully with much less errors, but feel free to point them out.)
4727371 Yes. I can definitely see that. Especially in Aliens vs Predator Requiem. That movie... was my favorite until I got into writing. Now it is my least favorite movie of the franchise... ever. However, I do hope to bring justice to their true image. A terrifying creature. Perfection only matched by its hostility. A survivor... unclouded by conscience, remorse, or delusions of morality.
Very good start. Can't wait to see what happens!
just found this story good so far, love xenomorphs