When Trixie tried an advanced teleportation spell, she was expecting to pop up in the next town. Instead, she found herself in a creepy research station on Mars...
I tend to shy away from the obvious dark stuff, but I think I could get behind this one. It is Halloween, after all.
I really like how you've shown just how shell shocked Trixie is. The horrors she's seen and her unwillingness to relive them. Curious to see how she made it this far.
3395236 Yay ! I kinda feel bad for sending that poor Trixie through hell (in all senses), but she's the universe's punching bag in the show after all... Must be some bad karma.
3395528 I'm glad you decided to try it out, let's hope it doesn't get too much for you. At least everything's upfront here : we already know who gets to live through the story and since it's Doom we're talking about, there should be lots and lots of gore...
3396735 Trixie was simply a normal showmare who had the misfortune, Of comming across the worst town in equestria, Every pony who was mean to her deserves a rusty potato, shoved through their left hoof, But most of all that demon of a pony *Says this next part with a hiss* Rainbow Dash
3400684 Sorry about that, I'm just following the rules for french typography. I don't even do that consciously, it's a reflex when I type, force of habit and everything... The extra spaces are supposed to be non-breaking ones, too, but I haven't found a way to get that to work, either in google docs or here. (I also have a hard time figuring out how capitalization works in english, in fact)
Anyways, I'll try to force myself and remove all the extra spaces after I'm done with the next chapter. I hope you appreciate how much of an effort that is... You have no idea how wrong it looks to me to have punctuation without spaces!
3401076 I see. That's actually news to me. It reminds me of when I saw a narrative in English for the first time, because double quotes (") are used to represent thoughts in Portuguese; for spoken lines, you have to break the line and use a long dash (—) in the next paragraph. There's a lot more to it than that, but this is enough to give you the gist of it.
I can already tell it's going to be hard for you to get used to this, so I'm going to recommend you to get an editor, at least for now. Learning how to get rid of that habit for other languages would actually do you good in the long run, though: English, Spanish, Portuguese, Russian, German, Finnish, Afrikaans, Swahili, Mandarin Chinese, Esperanto... all other languages I know do not use that typographical quirk. It just gets ugly if you use it when writing them.
3401714 Yeah, French also uses the long dash and line break for dialogue, plus you open and close it with guillemets : « » . Quotation marks (" or ') shouldn't even be used in proper French typography... The first time I read a book in English I was completely confused trying to figure out what was going on with the dialogues.
Anyway, I think I'll keep typing the way I do and fix things with some find/replace all. That should work.
Trixie + Doom = YES
well to be fair Trixie + Anything = YES
thumbs up for you
I tend to shy away from the obvious dark stuff, but I think I could get behind this one. It is Halloween, after all.
I really like how you've shown just how shell shocked Trixie is. The horrors she's seen and her unwillingness to relive them. Curious to see how she made it this far.
3395236
Yay !![:trixieshiftleft:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/trixieshiftleft.png)
I kinda feel bad for sending that poor Trixie through hell (in all senses), but she's the universe's punching bag in the show after all... Must be some bad karma.
3395528![:eeyup:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/eeyup.png)
I'm glad you decided to try it out, let's hope it doesn't get too much for you. At least everything's upfront here : we already know who gets to live through the story and since it's Doom we're talking about, there should be lots and lots of gore...
3396735
Trixie was simply a normal showmare who had the misfortune,
Of comming across the worst town in equestria,
Every pony who was mean to her deserves a rusty potato,
shoved through their left hoof,
But most of all that demon of a pony
*Says this next part with a hiss*
Rainbow Dash
Before ANYTHING else: stop putting spaces between the punctuation signs and the words that come right before them. Doing that is terrible formatting.![:ajbemused:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/ajbemused.png)
That said, it's a rather solid narrative so far. I'm hooked for sure.
3400684
Sorry about that, I'm just following the rules for french typography. I don't even do that consciously, it's a reflex when I type, force of habit and everything... The extra spaces are supposed to be non-breaking ones, too, but I haven't found a way to get that to work, either in google docs or here. (I also have a hard time figuring out how capitalization works in english, in fact)
Anyways, I'll try to force myself and remove all the extra spaces after I'm done with the next chapter. I hope you appreciate how much of an effort that is... You have no idea how wrong it looks to me to have punctuation without spaces!
Gah, this is so weird...![:raritydespair:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/raritydespair.png)
Aside from that, thanks for the fave.![:pinkiehappy:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/pinkiehappy.png)
3401076
I see. That's actually news to me. It reminds me of when I saw a narrative in English for the first time, because double quotes (") are used to represent thoughts in Portuguese; for spoken lines, you have to break the line and use a long dash (—) in the next paragraph. There's a lot more to it than that, but this is enough to give you the gist of it.
I can already tell it's going to be hard for you to get used to this, so I'm going to recommend you to get an editor, at least for now. Learning how to get rid of that habit for other languages would actually do you good in the long run, though: English, Spanish, Portuguese, Russian, German, Finnish, Afrikaans, Swahili, Mandarin Chinese, Esperanto... all other languages I know do not use that typographical quirk. It just gets ugly if you use it when writing them.
3401714![:derpyderp2:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/derpyderp2.png)
Yeah, French also uses the long dash and line break for dialogue, plus you open and close it with guillemets : « » . Quotation marks (" or ') shouldn't even be used in proper French typography... The first time I read a book in English I was completely confused trying to figure out what was going on with the dialogues.
Anyway, I think I'll keep typing the way I do and fix things with some find/replace all. That should work.
3401882 Language is so complicated...![:facehoof:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/facehoof.png)
![:pinkiesmile:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/pinkiesmile.png)
Regarding the capitalization, I've seen absolutely nothing wrong thus far. Good job.
I don't believe in signs. That being said, I was listening to the Doom 3: ROE soundtrack when I found this.
I am intrigued, and staying tuned.