It's the heat season, the day where mares go on the hunt while stallions run and hid for their lives. It also provides a chance for two mares to have soon fun and make a certain drake theirs.
Got to admit I almost yelled in a cheer when i saw this story had a update. I just re-read the first chapter and was thinking about it. I can't wait to see where they are going to take this I kinda would like them to take alittle S & M route and see Spike go all primal on those two lol. Anyway always happy to read your work and can't wait for the next update.
I'm loving the story though there's a bit of a bumpy road in your grammar. None the less, FlutterSpikePie ftw.
he messaged the mare's rump
motioning his hands to gently grip and message her butt.
So what did Spike say to Fluttershy rump in the message? as in sending a message. I think you meant massaged.
She roughly griped and messages his toned flesh she always wanted to feel, causing him to moan in her mouth
Oooh, she's messaging him back, once again, massages & gripped
as her drakefriend messaged her breasts
the message she was receiving has set her body on fire. It was as if Spike was a message therapist of the highest caliber.
revel her white laced panties and croissant
She pulled the croissant off of her to reveal her massive breast, without the croissant
This is the first time I've heard of someone using a pastry as a bra, I can imagine Pinkie doing it for the fun, but not Fluttershy. Could it be you meant Brassiere for the bra? also reveal. P.S this is a Croissant artepan.com/datos/productos/foto56/croissant.jpg
Well. Here I stand at a crossroads. Normally, I wouldn't poke at this kinda story with a ten yard stick. But I noticed your avatar, your name, and your classy demeanor in my comments. So I have to give one of my readers' stories a shot.
3967236 In that case I would suggest reading my first story, Legacy of Dragons and Knights. I consider it to be my masterpiece and it a lot further along than the rest of my stories.
3967595 I'm completely sorry about that. I haven't touch this story in so long that I forgot about you. To make it up to you I hear by dub you the official editor of this story. Though I have to warn you that I probably won't update this two often.
Honest to god this story has potential but you REALLY need an editor. The grammatical errors and wording break up the flow of an otherwise well-paced story, and make for jarring, distracted reading.
well i'm glad that this got updated but, other then that can't wait to see what 's new marefriends hav in store . Remember guys drink lots of fluids oh n' follow 's advice (even if they get a lil crazy sometimes )
Neutralize it---you're out of luck. Plus it's Zecora, she knows her potions--especially when they are ones that will work with any pony or dragon (i.e. no magic needed!) They will keep themselves from getting knocked up.
However, I could see a potential loophole where it's because Spike's a dragon that the potions are.....less effective. (i.e. the potions effects fade before Heat Week is over......and you know what that means )
4160256 If I remember right, it's from 4chan /tg/ boards, it's a comic book character called Spider Jerusalem mixed with a Tech Priest of Mars from the Adeptus Mechcanicus of the Warhammer 40k universe
4004623 Can't wait to see what Pinkie gets. I always felt she would be a freak in the sheets (or where ever she would want it lol) I would love to see Spike the girls do a tone of while role playing with each other lol, Shy and Pinkie acting like a cute puppies (with the outfits to match lol), Pinkie as a cheerleader and Shy as the quiet Liberian lol (if that doesn't strike to close to home for Spike lol),Even taking turns S&M (just think Shy looking up at Spike and Pinkie with her big puppy dog eyes.Then Pinkie forcing out Shy dom side lol). SO many possibility lol
4322700 I got a few idea but let tell you right now, I have limits and one of them is S&M. Spike being tied to the bed or chair and butt slapping is a far as I go in the catagory. Remeber people I got to write this stuff and I can't do a good job writing something I can't stand or like.
4323655 Oh thats fine sure, I was just throwing out random ideas that came to mind. I notice that alot of people on here like S&M things so that is why i threw it out there. But as I said a idea,you do know you "HAVE" to do sweets (frosting or whip cream) since you have a experience Pinkie leading them lol. Oh you could do a whole blindfold on Shy and have Pinkie and Spike have their way with her lol. And the alicon princesses abducted by the big scary dragon lol
Pinkie:"Fluttershy, this is pinkie over." Fluttershy: "Oh hi pinkie how did spike take the news?" Pinkie: "He took it well." Fluttershy: "So we dont have to be so shy about it next time?" Pinkie: "Yep" spike: "uh" Pinkie/fluttershy: "we forgot to wisper." I think this will happen in the next chapter I am also going to assume spike has wings
3967039 Hi! So I saw at the request for an editor and so I was hoping to offer my services in the case you don’t already have an editor lined up from an offer already made. I am totally willing to edit and my main fields of editing are grammar and story flow I also do spelling. If this is helpful PM me and I can help working.
>>DARKPHANTOM13 When will the next chapter come. Give me a name of the day and the exact percentage of what you already have done, such as 50%, 25%, 13%.
5188310 I'm kinda have a list of stuff I need to get to first before I update this. Don't worry, I should have the next one for this up well before Christmas at the lastest.
Got to admit I almost yelled in a cheer when i saw this story had a update. I just re-read the first chapter and was thinking about it. I can't wait to see where they are going to take this I kinda would like them to take alittle S & M route and see Spike go all primal on those two lol. Anyway always happy to read your work and can't wait for the next update.
Another FLutterpie story?
Insta fave!
3966791 With spike right in the middle!
I'm loving the story though there's a bit of a bumpy road in your grammar.
None the less, FlutterSpikePie ftw.
So what did Spike say to Fluttershy rump in the message? as in sending a message.
I think you meant massaged.
Oooh, she's messaging him back, once again, massages & gripped
This is the first time I've heard of someone using a pastry as a bra, I can imagine Pinkie doing it for the fun, but not Fluttershy.
Could it be you meant Brassiere for the bra? also reveal.
P.S this is a Croissant
artepan.com/datos/productos/foto56/croissant.jpg
3966967 Thanks for the help. This is why I've been looking for an editor. I don't suppose you're up for the task?
Well. Here I stand at a crossroads. Normally, I wouldn't poke at this kinda story with a ten yard stick. But I noticed your avatar, your name, and your classy demeanor in my comments. So I have to give one of my readers' stories a shot.
Here goes nothing!
3967039
I'm not the best, but I can give it a shot.
Imma head to bed now, so if you don't get a reply, go figure.
3967236 In that case I would suggest reading my first story, Legacy of Dragons and Knights. I consider it to be my masterpiece and it a lot further along than the rest of my stories.
3967039 but i told you i could help you edit it, i sent you the revised first chapter, and you didnt respond to me
3967595 I'm completely sorry about that. I haven't touch this story in so long that I forgot about you. To make it up to you I hear by dub you the official editor of this story. Though I have to warn you that I probably won't update this two often.
3968066 no worries, i really thought you didnt like the way i edited the first part and that´s why you didnt answered me back.
anybody else thinking the anti-pregnancy potion failed or is it just me?
Good! More!
3966945 Oh god no! ... Dammit.
Heil Knittler
Yay update.
I love it, and I have no other words to say about it at all,
10/10
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How long was it since this was damn updated ?
Hot damn! Hootershy and Kinkie Pie FTW
3979849 Yes she did.
Honest to god this story has potential but you REALLY need an editor. The grammatical errors and wording break up the flow of an otherwise well-paced story, and make for jarring, distracted reading.
Storyline: 8/10
Grammar: 3/10
Overall: Und. pending revision.
Wow that last part wasn't ominous in any way (he says sarcastically)
well i'm glad that this got updated but, other then that can't wait to see what 's new marefriends hav in store . Remember guys drink lots of fluids oh n' follow 's advice (even if they get a lil crazy sometimes )
I read you describe Spike's and Fluttershy's bodies, but did you describe Pinkie's? If you did, I missed it.
4004073 Don't worry, Pinkie will get her spotlight next chapter.
wait..... Spike is a dragon...
So.... maybe, just maybe... Spike's dragon makers would neutralize the potion's effects...
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Neutralize it---you're out of luck. Plus it's Zecora, she knows her potions--especially when they are ones that will work with any pony or dragon (i.e. no magic needed!) They will keep themselves from getting knocked up.
However, I could see a potential loophole where it's because Spike's a dragon that the potions are.....less effective. (i.e. the potions effects fade before Heat Week is over......and you know what that means )
4083978
You are right... Dragons are resilient creatures, not all powerful. It will weaken the potion.
Hope that loophole happens...moh gosh... Hahaha
4160256
If I remember right, it's from 4chan /tg/ boards, it's a comic book character called Spider Jerusalem mixed with a Tech Priest of Mars from the Adeptus Mechcanicus of the Warhammer 40k universe
Think u over did with the cover pic with thodes u know......
OK I like this, and personally I tend to avoid most harem stories. Looking forward to the next chapter. Liked and faved.
4004623 Can't wait to see what Pinkie gets. I always felt she would be a freak in the sheets (or where ever she would want it lol) I would love to see Spike the girls do a tone of while role playing with each other lol, Shy and Pinkie acting like a cute puppies (with the outfits to match lol), Pinkie as a cheerleader and Shy as the quiet Liberian lol (if that doesn't strike to close to home for Spike lol),Even taking turns S&M (just think Shy looking up at Spike and Pinkie with her big puppy dog eyes.Then Pinkie forcing out Shy dom side lol). SO many possibility lol
4322700 I got a few idea but let tell you right now, I have limits and one of them is S&M. Spike being tied to the bed or chair and butt slapping is a far as I go in the catagory. Remeber people I got to write this stuff and I can't do a good job writing something I can't stand or like.
4323655 Oh thats fine sure, I was just throwing out random ideas that came to mind. I notice that alot of people on here like S&M things so that is why i threw it out there. But as I said a idea,you do know you "HAVE" to do sweets (frosting or whip cream) since you have a experience Pinkie leading them lol. Oh you could do a whole blindfold on Shy and have Pinkie and Spike have their way with her lol. And the alicon princesses abducted by the big scary dragon lol
Pinkie:"Fluttershy, this is pinkie over."
Fluttershy: "Oh hi pinkie how did spike take the news?"
Pinkie: "He took it well."
Fluttershy: "So we dont have to be so shy about it next time?"
Pinkie: "Yep"
spike: "uh"
Pinkie/fluttershy: "we forgot to wisper."
I think this will happen in the next chapter I am also going to assume spike has wings
4161035 WTF
Update please
3967039 Hi! So I saw at the request for an editor and so I was hoping to offer my services in the case you don’t already have an editor lined up from an offer already made. I am totally willing to edit and my main fields of editing are grammar and story flow I also do spelling. If this is helpful PM me and I can help working.
5089466 Sure, I'll pm when I need you to edit a story that doesn't have an editor for it.
>>DARKPHANTOM13 When will the next chapter come. Give me a name of the day and the exact percentage of what you already have done, such as 50%, 25%, 13%.
5188310 I'm kinda have a list of stuff I need to get to first before I update this. Don't worry, I should have the next one for this up well before Christmas at the lastest.
So when will this story be updated?
5236810 Not sure, though I am currently working on the latest chapter.I would say around Thanksgiving at the latest.
5236824 American thanksgiving, you mean. In Canada we have already had thanksgiving xD
5272062 ...That would be bad.
Man can't wait for more
Dragon do have more endurance.