”What are you doing here Scootaloo?” asked Rainbow Dash, she was flying through Ghastly Gorge when she had seen the orange filly falling. She had swooped in and scooped in and plucked her from the sky.
“I was training..” Scootaloo replied, pulling at the rope tied around her stomach. Rainbow looked at it and laughed.
“You think you can learn to fly like that!” she rolled around laughing uncontrollably. Scootaloo just stared at her, eventually she managed to contain herself “Hows about this Scoots, I will train you, properly…” With that Scootaloo rushed forward and hugged Rainbow
“Thankyouthankyouthankyou!” she said with pure excitement.
Rainbow Dash slowly rolled over in bed the light burning through her eyelids and drawing her from her slumber, yet it wasn’t the sun that woke her.
“Wake up Dash, we need to go!” Scootaloo was hovering above her head, she looked over the teenage Pegasus, she had grown alot since she came to live with Rainbow Dash, her wings were bigger and her cutie mark or a cloud with a purple streak cutting in front of it shone in the morning glow.
It had been three years since the day Rainbow Dash interrupted Scoots training. She could now fly freely and was even starting to out run Rainbow Dash on the school runs.
But today was different, Scootaloo was extremely excited.
“Come on Sis, I have made breakfast already, come on, come on, come on, we are going to be late!” Scoot said as she flew out of the room. Rainbow slipped out of bed and slowly made her way to the kitchen, and sure enough, breakfast was made. It was a lovely spread of toast, hay fries, muffins and apple juice. Scootaloo was already sat down eating away, Rainbow walked over to her and kissed her on the forehead.
“This looks lovely squirt.” Rainbow complimented her and sat down and started to eat, conversation was slow, but the mare sitting opposite Rainbow was too excited to talk much.
Finally breakfast was finished and cleared away.
“Go get your bags Scoot.” Rainbow instructed and an orange and purple streak flew through the house and up the stairs. Rainbow smiled and went up stairs herself, went into her room and changed into her uniform. She was the new Captain of the wonderbolts, it had been a year already, yet it felt strange to be on the other side of the desk.
“I’m ready!” called Scootaloo from downstairs, Rainbow was still shocked at how quick she can get ready now that she could fly, she headed down to the lounge and sure enough Scootaloo was bouncing near the front door. Rainbow walked up to her and got her saddlebag of a hook and slung it over her back and opened the door, the two pegasi spread their wings and took off into the morning sky.
The two mares took it slow to start off with, they both knew today was going to be exhausting on them both, if not more on Rainbow Dash, knowing the upcoming event was going to push Scootaloo to her limit, like it did her when she started, the memories still fresh in her mind.
About half way through the journey Scootaloo spoke up.
“Rainbow Dash, you know I call you sister at times?” she asked, a small tear forming in her eye.
“Yes, and it warms my heart every time you do.” Rainbow replied, smiling over at the younger pegasus.
“Well to be truthful, I see you more as a mother than a sister.” Scootaloo said abruptly, this caused Rainbow to stop flapping, and fall a small way before she regained her senses.
“A mother? are you sure Squirt?” Rainbow asked, a tear forming in her eyes, she had always wanted a filly of her own, yet had never found the right colt to be with, and secretly, she often saw Scoot as a daughter than a sister.
“Yeah, as you know I never knew my parents, and you showed me some much love and care, it felt wrong to call you sister, even though I kept at it.” She replied, looking over at Rainbow, they both had tears rolling off their faces, being blown off by the wind hitting their faces.
“Scootaloo… I never knew….” Rainbow started but resorted to flying over to Scootaloo and giving her a very awkward inflight hug. When she let go she carried on speaking “I always saw you more of a daughter anyway… I always wanted to have a filly of my own, and then this awesome little filly came into my life, I just wanted to take her and claim her for my own… that filly was you Scootaloo, you showed me what it felt like to actually love someone more than I could a friend or a colt, you showed me what it was like to be a mother,” Rainbow said, the tears freely falling down her face, matting her coat and being whipped away by the wind. Scootaloo just stared at her, lost for words.
“I never knew..” She started, but then looked forward, some cloud structures started to appear in the distance, both mares stopped and landed on a stray cloud. “Can we rest a minute, calm down before we get there, I am sure you don’t want to be seen crying.” Scootaloo forced a giggle and caused Rainbow to laugh a bit as well, they both sat down and let the crying stop, used the cloud to wipe away the tears and clean themselves up. Then they took off.
“Race you.” Scootaloo said and shot off in an orange blur, Rainbow followed at top speed, causing a sonic rainboom. Scootaloo had stopped at the entrance when the rainbow shot over her, circled round and died out as Dash landed next to her, a cheer from the cadets filled the air.
“Nice entrance Captain.” Scootaloo saluted and through the large gates. Her first day of Wonderbolt training had just started, and now Rainbow was her mother and her superior.
3309794 Thank you for pointing it out, this has just been changed
extremely well done i would love to see a serious story written around this.
3309867 I may, depends on how the world takes it
So far so good
this is a cute story! i like it so far.
3310475 why thank you
Beautiful!
I'm sad you didn't grab me for some editing though.
3313394 you where asleep according to your daughter
3313554 CURSE YOU SANDMAN!
3313566 hehe
it was over in a moment
3313606 what do you mean?
3313609
it was just a moment in time, not really much more to say, you had a good build up, but i left me kind of high and dry like it didn't really have a point or the baseline was all you had, this would be a great opener for a story, but since it's a one off, it kind of just cut off too short or the feeling wasn't quite there
3313618 I see what you mean, well this is my first one shot, and my first story revolving around Scootaloo and Rainbow Dash. I do have plans in the works however to expand that story with a sequel, but I was testing the water so to speak. To she how well the story does and see what the response to the One shot was.
But thank you anyway for the comments, I really do appreciate it.
Needs some work. Lots of missing commas, some missing apostrophes, at least one missing period, and several run-on sentences. Those run-ons needs to be chopped up into smaller sentences, or at least divided with appropriately placed semi-colons. There's a good idea here, but have you given any thought to working with an editor?
3314221 I will admit this was rushed as my editor was away, but I thank thee for the suggestions...
3314221 expanding on your comment: Also, you may or may not know this, but when a charecter is identified after dialouge, a comma instead of a period is placed at the end of the dialougue, i.e.:
"I'm so glad I'm in the Wonderbolts," said Rainbow Dash.
Otherwise, grreat story
3309794>>3309867>>3310137>>3310475>>3313394>>3313606>>3314221>>3315087>>3315087 Thank you for your input, If you would all like to check my blog, I have opened this up for a vote as to whether or not to make a sequel
A Mother Superior is the head of a convent.
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Rainbow Dash is now Scoots Mother and also her superior.
Therefore Rainbow Dash is a nun
3465997 HAHA...I never meant to but in a joke like that, nice logic,