An innocuous package left on Twilight Sparkle's doorstep marks the beggining of a journey of self discovery, which will challenge her perceptions of Equestrian society, her relationships with the ponies closest to her, and even her own sexuality
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Dominant Rarity is incredibly hot.
Not enough clop
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Thank you for being bluntly honest! I wonder whether you mean the story as a whole, or just chapter 7? Could you tell me if you intend to read anymore of this story? If not, is there a specific reason or were you just dissatisfied with the amount of sex?
Also, to be fair, I did mention in the story description that I might be light on the clop from time to time. Would it be more helpful if I included an indicator at the beginning of each chapter, letting readers know how much sex is in that part of the story?
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You're welcome!
On to answering your clarifying questions, it's really just chapter 7. You build up the sexual tension throughout the entire chapter, save when Twilight is sent out on her own, while simultaneously addressing a few minor points the story has brought up so far. This tension is built up, only for you to blue ball us in the end. This isn't really an issue, however, in all of the other chapters, there are story advancements that distract from the amount (or lack of) sex in the chapter.
To be fair, I dare say that the ground work of future story development has been lain out in this chapter.
As for the suggestion of a forward letting people know about any sexual encounters in the chapter, I would very much appreciate a brief description of the kink involved. As well as an exact word count in the mentioned scene, the paragraph that it starts on and any illustration material to better the readers understanding of the scene. Preferably in color.
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Thanks for replying, I really appreciate your feedback.
I almost made chapter 7 incredibly long in order to have the following scene with Rarity and Twilight, but I decided last minute to break it off into the next chapter, so that that sex scene could be more or less the focus of it's own chapter, since it kind of marks the beginning of their dom/sub dynamic. Also, I had already missed the weekend and didn't want to get any further behind.
I will make a point of including a brief description of kinks to expect each chapter, but I'm a little less enthused with giving word counts and paragraph numbers. I'll consider it. Also, I have no drawing skills to speak of, nor funds for commissions.
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Honestly, I wasn't being serious at all in that last paragraph, but if you see merit in some of it, by all means, include what you want.
As for the frequency of updates, it IS holiday season, so spending time away from the computer (or tablet in my case) is to be expected.