I shout in agony as my nose crunches beneath the door. I jump back and fall on my back both of my fore hooves going to my nose. My shouts are nasally and demonstrate pain in tones of mixed anger and fear.
"Ow my nhose! For the love of Celestisa I thzink I broke my nhose!" I shout to the peak volume capable by my lungs.
I hear a feminine scream of shock and terror. "Oh my!" Princess Luna enters my vision and drops to my right side. "Let me see it! Move your hooves!" I obey and drop my hooves despite every instinct to cradle my nose. She cringes. "I am so sorry, Star Dasher! Please come on, can you stand? Let me clean that up!" She assists me as I attempt to stand and am forced to cry at the same time. No matter who or what you are, if you take a good whap! to the nose you will have tears. My glasses lay on the floor a few meters from where I had been hit. I don't get a good look at them, but no damage appeared to have been done. To be fair ,however, I am looking through tears and not focusing on getting led to a place where the Princess could give me some medical aid for my possibly broken nasal passages.
The Princess leads me across the hall to the bedroom. I have forgotten all about the ejection warning at this point and besides, the Princess was leading me. She opens the door and guides me in. I am walking with my fore hooves over my blood-hose of a nose. Little red drips get through and fall to the carpet.
"S-sorry about the carpet!" I say through tears and blood.
"Shhh" Luna says trying to keep me quiet. "It is not your concern. It is my fault you are bleeding. " She leads me with her right wing over me and her right fore hoof keeping me close to guide me. "I have a little medical kit in my bathroom for nasty boo-boos like this." Luna and I hobble towards a bathroom past a large, curtained, purple bed and a few pieces of basic bedroom furniture. A few dressers, a book shelf or two, and a few tables and chairs. Luna opened the door to the mainly white bathroom with purple shower curtains and a few little moons taped onto, or sewn into every thing.
She looks above the sink to a mirror cabinet that she opens with magic. On the inside there were three rows of shelves. One of them had small red medical kit about the size of good-sized book. It hovers down in a field of dark blue light; I was hanging my head over the toilet and resting my chin against the rim. Blood turned the water a redish-pink color. I sneezed and then groaned in agony as my nose began to throb. A few droplets of blood ran down the sides of the toilet bowl porcelain.
Luna sits next to me and places a hoof on my back. "Lean back." She says.
I obey and lean my head and back as far back as they would go. Luna took out a few bandages and disinfectant.
"This may hurt a little." She says.
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Princess Luna is a bit worrying. She's clearly one of those mares with strong motherly instincts. I've never had a princess worry about my head. Luna fears that I may have suffered a minor concussion. She has me lay in her bed for a minute and warns me that if I fall asleep she'll stick her horn 'where the sun doesn't shine'. That confuses me for a second then I realize what she had said and laugh. Luna leaves the room and leaves me to my thoughts.
The Princess's bed is quite comfortable. Purple-blue sheets with many suns and moons, I think they are made of silk or something like it. The pillows lack any pillow cases but are made of quickly welcoming material and have good designs already. They are striped horizontally with blue and violet and seem to glow in low-light. The curtains that came down from a skeleton frame held up by the corners of the bed, let very little light in. To be fair, the room's two windows had thick curtains. It seemed to me that the princess of the night was obsessed with purple and blue.
Luna reenters the room with a guard behind her. "I found a guard who has medical expertise. I just want to be sure you do not have a concussion."
The guard has terrible bed-side manner. He is a tad rough in his examination. Like the one at the gate, he grunts and seems very stern. He makes me move my head in odd ways and watch the tip of a pen as he moves it around and watches my eyes. This goes on for a few minutes then he stops.
"Well......no concussion. Your nose will heal in a few days maybe a week or two at most." He grunts. Then he leaves with a minor few mumbles to himself. Something about not getting paid enough to assist the Princess's attempted murder victims.
Luna smiles at me. "I'm sorry about your nose."
"It's no problem. I left my glasses and suit cases in the hall. Could you go get my glasses?" I ask as I start to get up. Luna put a hoof on my shoulder and leans in, she gives me a kiss on the cheek.
"I hope your second day will be better." Luna says as she goes off to find my glasses.
I feel as if my body temperature has jumped twenty degrees. I put a hoof to the spot were I was kissed. As I rise from the bed and move the curtains aside to clear a path for me. Once up and on my feet I feel the need to pee and quickly walk to the bedroom's bathroom.
"interesting" * reclines in armchair * "go on."
I like it though I pretty much like every story. Nyapu nyapu!
3104822 I'm the same way I dis-like very few stories. i2.kym-cdn.com/photos/images/original/000/158/619/14381-fluttershy-yay.jpg
This story is littered with Gramatical mistakes... I would like to point than out but I am using an iPhone.... So I can't.
Orta cosa, he lost his glasses right? Wouldn't he be near blind as he said before?
Some grammar mistakes here and there, and you should probably stop writing new stories soon, because you already have a bunch of other unfinished ones you let lay for a long while.
But besides that Ima keep an eye out, I'm a sucker for these things (un)fortunately
3105201 It was explained that he could see within 20 or so meters. Do the measurements of the average bedroom...less than 20 meters lol.
3105259 I know. I made myself vow to make this the last new one. The time to either conclude, continue, or delete old ones is now. (Deletion is rare unless I feel the project is unsalvageable of course)
Moar!
3106224 Its coming. However if you take a look at my stories list only one is complete the rest are waiting for more chapters, so I may take time to work on other project down the road. However, for now full speed ahead!
Like the profile picture btw! :)
3105421 That's right, shortsighted. Sorry, that little fact was drowned in the ocean of grammatical mistakes.
Either that, or it was too early in the morning.
I like the idea but I really think that the story needs to slow down quite a bit.
3108414 I agree.
Good concept but watch your pacing. I know that you have tons of super-special-awesome ideas in your head that are trying their best to burrow their way out and go ker-splat onto Microsoft Word but make the readers earn it! If you do that, the impact will be that much more meaningful. Also, I could be wrong but your main character feels like a self-insert. Don't get me wrong; its not a bad thing, just something I noticed. It's not uncommon and not bad and I'm certainly guilty of it from time to time but I have found that after tirelessly pouring over hundreds of stories from all over the damn place, keeping real-life from factoring too much into a story that focuses primarily on a single protagonist that bears a striking resemblance to many of the fans out there (trust me; I know) certainly doesn't hurt. Of course, I could be wrong and you could be drawing inspiration from anywhere else but I felt the need to offer a little friendly advice. Having said all that, I'm gonna fave and like this one because I'd like to see your work evolve and improve and such. It has potential and I adore Luna as well! I honestly like it and on that note, keep it up and I will continue to keep track with great interest.