It was a terrible, rainy day in Ponyville. Nail-biting rain clouds were gathering in the sky, and flocks of birds were heading towards the Everfree Forest for cover. Dull grey tufts of clouds engulfed the creeping sun and everypony was huddled inside their little cottages for cover. however, there was one rainbow maned mare that would not be intimidated by the thunderous storm stomping towards her little hometown. Rainbow Dash batted her wings furiously against the gloomy skies, higher and higher. She knew the huge storm that the weather ponies had scheduled was dangerous, but in the air, she's unstoppable! However, there was one stallion admiring her grace. Her beauty. A certain Pegasus with a dark navy mane and a stunning sky blue coat of luscious fuzz.
Soarin'.
He simply stared and gawped as the cyan blue Pegasus descended higher and higher into the raging storm brewing above Ponyville, her gorgeous rainbow mane blowing against the heavy wind. Her stunning magenta eyes twinkled with glee as she bolted towards the silver moon. Soarin' wondered when she would skid to a halt and begin to descend back down to Ponyville.
Without warning, Rainbow stopped in mid air and gazed down at the little town that she loved with all her heart, wishing she could fly higher, but knowing that the bedraggled storm could trample her if she did. She began to make her descent back down to Ponyville, performing a jaw-dropping Sonic Rainboom on the way. A huge array of colours errupting in the sky like an impossible firework. Soarin' was always completely enhanced by it, even though he had seen her do the incredible trick a couple times. Then it hit him. He knew how he felt about the rainbow haired mare that he had been watching ever since she left flight school.
He was in love.
It was a bright new day, and Rainbow Dash was lazily gliding towards Sugarcube Corner, a huge infectious smile glazed across her face. Pinks was, for the fourth time this week, throwing one of her good old signature parties, and she was as exited as ever. Her mind had just began to wonder when suddenly...
"RAINBOW!!!"
Dash shrieked as Spike hurtled towards her, blowing dragon smoke in her face.
"Spike!!! Do you mind?!" Rainbow growled, a tiny bit of rage taking over.
"Sorry Dash...It's Soarin'! Ya know, from the Wonderbolts? He's here to see you! He's waiting down at Sugarcube Corner!"
"OMIGOSH OMIGOSH OMIGOSH OMIGOSH OMIGOSH!!!!" Rainbow shrieked with glee, briefly hugged Spike and bolted towards Sugarcube Corner, a gorgeous rainbow trail frantically chasing after her.
Rainbow hit the roof of Sugarcube Corner with a loud thud, and immediately spotted the navy blue maned Pegasus practically drowning in a cluster of fan girl ponies. She couldn't help but think to herself: that will be me one day. Soarin' noticed Rainbow Dash and quickly flew over to greet her.
"Hey Dash! How are ya? We have so much to discuss." He looked around briefly and leaned over to whisper into her delicate, sky blue ear. "Come with me."
Dash obediently followed alongside him, hoping that Pinks wouldn't take the fact that she didn't show up for her party too harshly.
The two pegasi dropped down on a huge fluffy cloud overlooking the town of Ponyville, Soarin' still grinning sheepishly.
"Soarin'? You've been grinning at me like that ever since I saw you down at Sugarcube Corner! What gives?" RD asked curiously and slightly suspiciously. Soarin immediately shook his head and wiped the goofy grin off his face, wishing he had made a better impression.
"Uhhh... No reason! Anyway, back to the point... I've been ordered down here to ask you something."
"What is it?" Asked Rainbow Dash, trying to keep her cool.
Soarin' cleared his throat and spoke. "Well, the Wonderbolts tryouts are coming up next week, and we would love it if you were to join us and give it a shot. Your almost sure to get in!"
"You...I-I mean they... W-want me to try out for the Wonderbolts?!" Rainbow stammered, her insides leaping. Soarin grinned.
"You betcha."
Rainbow returned the grin and managed, barely though, to stay calm. Even though the exited ness was getting the better of her.
"Just one condition," Soarin' exclaimed, his emerald green eyes twinkling.
"And what's that?" Dash cocked her head to one side.
"Come out with me, in Canterlot, tommorow night, six o'clock sharp." Said Soarin', grinning goofily and looking directly into RD's engulfing magenta eyes. Oh, how he loved those eyes. But, to his disappointment, her gorgeous eyes were in fact, anywhere but on his. They were looking around cautiously, filled with horror and disbelief. You can't go out with a stallion! She thought to herself. Your Rainbow Dash! The toughest mare in ponyville! NOT one of those mushy gushy girly ponies! If my friends ever found out, or worse, if all of Ponyville found out, I would lose my whole reputation!
But if it's for the Wonderbolts...well... What harm is just one tiny date?
"Dash? You ok?" Soarin' snapped Rainbow back into reality. She did a quick look around for Pinkie-just in case- and took a deep breath.
"I would love to." Dash breathed, regretting the words as soon as they came out of her mouth. But it would be worth it. Soon, she'd be living the dream, soaring with the Wonderbolts, doing twists, turns and daring dives. It had been her dream ever since she was a little filly. It was her destiny.
"Ok great! See you tommorow, Dashie." Soarin said goofily, winking. And with that, he took off into the gorgeous night sky, leaving Rainbow Dash to replay what just happened in her mind.
"No one can know."she whispered.
you would think she'd be exited... but she dooooossse have a reputation to uphold :]
Another SoarinDash? I've been seeing a few more of these popping up, and I'm deeply pleased to see it so. I can't wait for more of this to come out.
3098667 Yeah well I figured that Rainbow wouldn't exactly be thrilled to have a date, with her reputation and all.
3098816 sorry, my phone auto corrected fanfic to clopfic...
You need an editor, it's a great fic, it's written well. But I saw a couple mistakes in there. Like the fact that you didn't do this:
"she fell of the roof," you completely missed out the commas/ full stops
Also if you put thoughts in italics it looks better
3099090 thanks for the suggestions! I have changed the thinking to italics and I will definatly think about getting an editor. I'm not really the best at punctuation anyway, haha.
3099728 you still havnt changed the speech mistakes
Full stops and commas go before the speech mark not after. In some cases there is no commas/full stop
For an editor, I'd try going to one of the editing groups that are out there, never been to one myself coz I've got my personal editor so I do t know how they work.
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This will happen when they get found out. I'm calling it.
When is next chapter coming out? I'd like to see what happens next please!!!!!
Epicness!!!!!!!!!!!! Make more, more, more, more :) I'll keep watching out for more just remember... ill be if you dont make more!!!! Love this story as always In eed chapter four Sorry if I scared ya Anyways please make more
I love it so far keep on going great job :)
I think Soarin should of asked "Will you go on a date with me" But instead if that it's good so far
I like it nice job I love the soarindash ship and because ur story is SO good I will spare my lecture on grammar because I'd put EVERY one to sleep (I'm a bookworm so yeah....u don't want to hear me ranting about grammar hehe)
I LOVE IT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
I like how you portrayed Dash as only agreeing to the date because of the wonderbolts.
You have a great story concept here,just get an editor and this could be a great story.
(Is it me or am I using complicated words?)
This is amaaaaazing!!! The fact that Rainbow doesnt like him YET LOL!!!
Love it so far!!
I like it! A lot of authors change Rainbow's personality completely and make her heads-over-hooves for Soarin. I love how when you write about Dash, she's still Dash, not an OC who happens to share Rainbow's cutiemark, name, and looks. XD
Wow, this is really good!!! I like how you described me. It was exact. Perfect!