3077722 Still, letting us know who will be the focus of each chapter would be nice. Would certainly let me know which ones are worth reading. Because really, I don't much care for this Alec character, or his extremely random lemon with Luna.
I don't think the commas are necessary here, unless you're partitioning off the "and eager" portion. Unless this is an afterthought, it doesn't make sense to separate it.
3081507 if you don't use commas, put eager first; it'll look better being in alphabetical order, but if you're just using it for emphasis, keep it like it is. Also, I must say, you've inspired me with this.
3082563 I came back to show you the cover art, then I saw this. Here's the cover art. i.imgur.com/KUxZjAj.png I'm not gonna ask, but I will say it's probably about as bad as getting semen in your eye, though I'm not sure which is worse.
that ...e_0 was hmm how should i put this \00/ *ammunition depleted* damn you combine damn you! (ehh?) ammunition being spunk combine being luna even dough i wuv her i hate it when i'm depleted!
3134395 i...excuse me while i go and ROLF on the floor *walk's away laughing hit's the floor and starts laughing* ok ok i'm back sorry that was funny video
there wasn't much buildup to them having this kind of relationship in the chapter this scene came from. IT was good for clop, but as part of the rest of the story it feels disembodied, too separate.
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The picture made me think that this was about Celestia. Maybe you should use this picture instead.
3077601 I was hoping somepony would use the Fluttershy gif, that's the same one I post on stories like this!!
3077709 It will be... it's just this was the first part of the story.
3077722
Your welcome?
3077722
Still, letting us know who will be the focus of each chapter would be nice. Would certainly let me know which ones are worth reading. Because really, I don't much care for this Alec character, or his extremely random lemon with Luna.
I thought he was being punished not getting laid and having what I assume is going to be a romantic moment with Luna
3077902 He did get punished, having his fluids returned to him... as for Luna, when you're in the mood...
I don't think the commas are necessary here, unless you're partitioning off the "and eager" portion. Unless this is an afterthought, it doesn't make sense to separate it.
3081373 It was meant to emphasise the fact that Luna was getting turned on by her actions.
Would it still be better without the commas?
3081507 if you don't use commas, put eager first; it'll look better being in alphabetical order, but if you're just using it for emphasis, keep it like it is.
Also, I must say, you've inspired me with this.
3081517 Ok, thanks for the tip.
And really? Damn... didn't think it was that good!
...What kind of punishment is that?
3081937 You ever been forced to taste your own spunk? It's not nice...
3082015 Have you? Cause it sounds like it?
3082476 Yep. Not going to let that happen again.
3082563 I came back to show you the cover art, then I saw this. Here's the cover art.
i.imgur.com/KUxZjAj.png
I'm not gonna ask, but I will say it's probably about as bad as getting semen in your eye, though I'm not sure which is worse.
3084312 Interesting... wonder what she's 'guarding'.
And at least you can wipe it from your eye.
3084323 Don't give me that crap, you know exactly what picture that's from
The burning doesn't go away that easy, either.
3084327 Wait... is that... Summer Glade?
3084384 Ding ding
3084387 Well... damn, she's hot!! I can't wait to read that!!
3084391 Wait time is about two weeks, depending on school
3082563 I am so sorry bro.
3081604 Hey luck I can't find the next chapter
lusty luna or just a cowinkiedink
3082563 Maybe It's just yours.
nice
that ...e_0 was hmm how should i put this \00/
*ammunition depleted* damn you combine damn you! (ehh?) ammunition being spunk combine being luna even dough i wuv her i hate it when i'm depleted!
3134364 Thanks to you, I have the image of Luna doing this.
3134395
i...excuse me while i go and ROLF on the floor *walk's away laughing hit's the floor and starts laughing* ok ok i'm back sorry that was funny video
Wait a minute, if she was wearing trousers, then why she had to wear stockings too?
there wasn't much buildup to them having this kind of relationship in the chapter this scene came from. IT was good for clop, but as part of the rest of the story it feels disembodied, too separate.
Damn...
5091209 indeed sir... Indeed...