“Come back in a few days,” she said. “Not now. I must recuperate. You’re correct, I have that toy. You’re Discord? I remember things you’ve done. And this is your true form?”
Her eyes studied the winsome, harmless-looking little alicorn mare.
“I have many toys, darling, and none surpass me in the gifts of eros. So, if you mean to explore sexuality…”
And she licked her lips, a mad light dancing in her eyes.
In my personal opinion this is the hottest chapter so far. 3411284 I agree. Possibly the only thing more horrifying than Rarity and Discord is Pinkie doing what she does best and Discord. I fear reality couldn't survive that encounter.
I haven't started reading this one yet, I'm just now starting book 4, but I had to post this here. I've noticed an amusing thing with this series: Each "book" is exactly one chapter longer than the previous one. Magic Bit had 21 chapters, Worst-Day had 22, Foaling 23, and Desires 24. Let's see if this one can continue the trend and hit twenty five.
I really can't avoid saying this any longer. But I think you might be using "Lady" a tad much. Something about how Rarity speaks is really off-puting at times.
Loved Derpy, that frightened "OMG WTF DID YOU JUST DO TO ME WITH YOUR TONGUE!?" expression with the half curled wings. Derpy is cute, and Fluttershy is possibly the kinkiest bitch here. She likes to watch and play her 'guitar solos' during Rarity and Pinkie's voyeurism lol xD
I like how Scoots took the moral high ground on that. Sweetie Belle seems to just be too much of a bad girl, I know she loves Scoots but I worry she might endup cheating on Scoots with how much she loves the dick in this story. That would make for some interesting drama and heartaches if done with the right ponies, but we'll see. I love that they are still trying to figure out boundaries while Sweetie is still in the "This is fun!" mentality that will end up causing issues later seeing how some of those types end out.
Nice chapter. Could use some tweaking on Rarity's speech in a few scenes. Still rather nice overall. Been too busy to read other things as a certain... lack luster sea faring map obsessed stallion fic was just a bit long winded and continued to lose its focus jumping to other scenes that didn't need to be given as much focus, which could of been done through exposition then dialogue, and stuff... that kept me from getting to things I'd rather read.
Well, Pinkie was quite incredible in this little chapter. Did... what did she do to Rarity anyway? It sounds slightly serious. That ending though it going to make me quite happy. Chaos wants to explore sexuality, so she goes to the queen of sexual exploitation. I can't wait to read the next bit of the story. And gah, I'm ashamed of myself. I'd normally read something this long in a matter of 2 or 3 days, but this is taking me a week! Oh well, I get to savor it more like this.
Aaaand Discord arrives at Rarity's door.
....
...this is going to be epic.
Chaos is gonna find out the chaos in her body and mind when Rarity is done I'm sure, she'll wish she'd done it sooner xD
Oh boy Chaos defenetly just bit off more than she could chew.
...That is terrifying.
In my personal opinion this is the hottest chapter so far.
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I agree. Possibly the only thing more horrifying than Rarity and Discord is Pinkie doing what she does best and Discord. I fear reality couldn't survive that encounter.
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Oh, it gets worse. Two words: jealous Derpy.
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Oh, shit. This is not going to end well. Or quietly.
oh man, i think discord just met his match!
... So Chaos has come to Rarity. This will be interesting.
I absolutely love the voyeurism element you've got going in this story.
I haven't started reading this one yet, I'm just now starting book 4, but I had to post this here.
I've noticed an amusing thing with this series: Each "book" is exactly one chapter longer than the previous one. Magic Bit had 21 chapters, Worst-Day had 22, Foaling 23, and Desires 24. Let's see if this one can continue the trend and hit twenty five.
Aaaaaannnnnddddd all caught up now!
Chaos, you have no idea just how much trouble you've gotten your self into this time
I really can't avoid saying this any longer. But I think you might be using "Lady" a tad much. Something about how Rarity speaks is really off-puting at times.
Loved Derpy, that frightened "OMG WTF DID YOU JUST DO TO ME WITH YOUR TONGUE!?" expression with the half curled wings. Derpy is cute, and Fluttershy is possibly the kinkiest bitch here. She likes to watch and play her 'guitar solos' during Rarity and Pinkie's voyeurism lol xD
I like how Scoots took the moral high ground on that. Sweetie Belle seems to just be too much of a bad girl, I know she loves Scoots but I worry she might endup cheating on Scoots with how much she loves the dick in this story. That would make for some interesting drama and heartaches if done with the right ponies, but we'll see. I love that they are still trying to figure out boundaries while Sweetie is still in the "This is fun!" mentality that will end up causing issues later seeing how some of those types end out.
Nice chapter. Could use some tweaking on Rarity's speech in a few scenes. Still rather nice overall. Been too busy to read other things as a certain... lack luster sea faring map obsessed stallion fic was just a bit long winded and continued to lose its focus jumping to other scenes that didn't need to be given as much focus, which could of been done through exposition then dialogue, and stuff... that kept me from getting to things I'd rather read.
Any~whoozles, catch ya next time.
the hammer is sweetie's penis
The amount of humping in this book is crazy. I think there have been more sex scenes than chapter breaks.
Well, Pinkie was quite incredible in this little chapter. Did... what did she do to Rarity anyway? It sounds slightly serious. That ending though it going to make me quite happy. Chaos wants to explore sexuality, so she goes to the queen of sexual exploitation. I can't wait to read the next bit of the story. And gah, I'm ashamed of myself. I'd normally read something this long in a matter of 2 or 3 days, but this is taking me a week! Oh well, I get to savor it more like this.
~SolidFire
Commence read.
Tantalizing tongue techniques from Pinkie. Crazy stuff.
Scootaloo trying to get Sweetie on the right track. A little harshness from Sweetie.
Chaos is in for something...