"I refuse to be the alicorn of purple fucked squishy!" From now until the end of time, that will be my favorite uote ever. A close second is the phrase "winking horsevagina". Brava good sir!
3345886 Well, art is important. I mean, how does one convey musically the feeling of giving oral sex to her partner's penis when it is magically cloned and embedded in an alicorn mare at the same time?
On the one hoof, Octy going crazy is kinda funny. On the other, it doesn't seem to suit her, either.
On the other, it's nice to see Luna and Lyra get a nod. This story's felt a little empty without much of a reference to them.
On the third, it's AMAZING that Cadance came to the rescue like that. I think she and Twi still need to have a heart-to-heart. It'd be nice to see Twi finally unload.
On the fourth? Celestia notably doesn't like to be reminded of the fact that she's pretty much immortal in all other respects, I see. I think Trixie touched a nerve there, unknowingly.
Okay, now I'm trying to figure out where Octavia's obsession is taking us. She's treating it like a counterpart to the Elements of Harmony. If it turns into a rainbow wave-motion gun, I will probably piss myself laughing.
And as determined as Trixie is, I think she may need help getting Twilight under control here. But who to ask? Idea! But I'll keep it to myself...
Ukh, I'm not to happy I couldn't get to reading this until Friday, but totally worth the wait. I was going to say that I'm not sure what's sadder, Fluttershy or the well-intentioned mis-gendering of Discord... but then wham. "When all is said and done," indeed. I really hope that canon dares to touch the issue.
I mean the immortality part, not Octy's source of inspiration.
Ooh, speaking of which, I knew Jinx wrote music, but I really enjoyed the music-theory bits. Aug. fourth to perfect to minor third... unusual but promising. Minor seconds aren't all that difficult to work with, though; anyone who isn't following this should google up "Catastrophe" from the Final Fantasy VI soundtrack. Octy's just being overdramatic.
So, about Fluttershy... really? No "Listen, Twilight, we really need to talk." Twilight respects others opinions maybe a little more than she should, but even I'd be crushed to see her name. Like, really, she couldn't talk about it - now I feel lower than dirt.
All around this is a very fun chapter though shot through with dark. Absolutely love it.
A pretty effective breather chapter after the last couple. The little get-together with Celestia was rather cute, and it IS kind of nice to see that Celestia does indeed still posses a libido.
In fact, it seems like it's getting in gear now that her old lover is wandering around as a pony again.
Practice and determination. To YOU it's 'consistent', to me I'm always fretting over whether this week ain't what I hoped it would be. If I manage my time so that I have several days to go over what I did and revise it, I can usually figure out where I'm going and set up a hell of a lot in advance for upcoming chapters, and it's that setting up that makes you feel like it's a sustained narrative with urgent end-goals or at least clear objectives (that usually conflict and look like they'll end in a big wreck). You can do it too, and six or eight books later you'll have the same amount of practice and will be able to write the stuff that interests you, with many structural (and workflow) things becoming second nature. First thing is, get your butt to writing, and not erasing!
I'm having trouble reading this without leaning back from the screen and balking at the incredible amounts of pure insanity on the page. Arias about Stout Heart's penis were funny when they were in the background, and now that they're being used for this kind of brazen, audacious humor, they're more like a hilarious cloppy show of force than anything else.
Your sexual world-building clicks well here. I like seeing it even when it doesn't jive with me as a writer, because it just feels right to make such things click with greater ideas about culture and life.
Octavia is making music in dedication to Stout Heart's penis... just like she promised in the other one. Which chapter in which story had the Flight Lightning clop scene? I can't find it for the life of me...
Stout still is hiding the Chaos information. That should lead to an interesting conversation, though seems like things are at least being acknowledged by Celestia.
Man, Octavia's starting to act like a bitch again
"I refuse to be the alicorn of purple fucked squishy!"
From now until the end of time, that will be my favorite uote ever. A close second is the phrase "winking horsevagina".
Brava good sir!
3345886 Well, art is important. I mean, how does one convey musically the feeling of giving oral sex to her partner's penis when it is magically cloned and embedded in an alicorn mare at the same time?
On the one hoof, Octy going crazy is kinda funny. On the other, it doesn't seem to suit her, either.
On the other, it's nice to see Luna and Lyra get a nod. This story's felt a little empty without much of a reference to them.
On the third, it's AMAZING that Cadance came to the rescue like that. I think she and Twi still need to have a heart-to-heart. It'd be nice to see Twi finally unload.
On the fourth? Celestia notably doesn't like to be reminded of the fact that she's pretty much immortal in all other respects, I see. I think Trixie touched a nerve there, unknowingly.
Okay, now I'm trying to figure out where Octavia's obsession is taking us. She's treating it like a counterpart to the Elements of Harmony. If it turns into a rainbow wave-motion gun, I will probably piss myself laughing.
And as determined as Trixie is, I think she may need help getting Twilight under control here. But who to ask? Idea! But I'll keep it to myself...
Brilliant.
Ukh, I'm not to happy I couldn't get to reading this until Friday, but totally worth the wait. I was going to say that I'm not sure what's sadder, Fluttershy or the well-intentioned mis-gendering of Discord... but then wham. "When all is said and done," indeed. I really hope that canon dares to touch the issue.
I mean the immortality part, not Octy's source of inspiration.
Ooh, speaking of which, I knew Jinx wrote music, but I really enjoyed the music-theory bits. Aug. fourth to perfect to minor third... unusual but promising. Minor seconds aren't all that difficult to work with, though; anyone who isn't following this should google up "Catastrophe" from the Final Fantasy VI soundtrack. Octy's just being overdramatic.
So, about Fluttershy... really? No "Listen, Twilight, we really need to talk." Twilight respects others opinions maybe a little more than she should, but even I'd be crushed to see her name. Like, really, she couldn't talk about it - now I feel lower than dirt.
All around this is a very fun chapter though shot through with dark. Absolutely love it.
Oops, I meant "Dark World" from FF6.
Oh Twilight. You and your wingboner.
A pretty effective breather chapter after the last couple. The little get-together with Celestia was rather cute, and it IS kind of nice to see that Celestia does indeed still posses a libido.
In fact, it seems like it's getting in gear now that her old lover is wandering around as a pony again.
It's astounding that you can consistently write this much in such a short amount of time. What is your secret?
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If I'm so dang great why ain't I famous?
Practice and determination. To YOU it's 'consistent', to me I'm always fretting over whether this week ain't what I hoped it would be. If I manage my time so that I have several days to go over what I did and revise it, I can usually figure out where I'm going and set up a hell of a lot in advance for upcoming chapters, and it's that setting up that makes you feel like it's a sustained narrative with urgent end-goals or at least clear objectives (that usually conflict and look like they'll end in a big wreck).
You can do it too, and six or eight books later you'll have the same amount of practice and will be able to write the stuff that interests you, with many structural (and workflow) things becoming second nature. First thing is, get your butt to writing, and not erasing!
Awwww, Celestia misses Swirly's cock. That should lead to something suitably traumatic.
I'm having trouble reading this without leaning back from the screen and balking at the incredible amounts of pure insanity on the page. Arias about Stout Heart's penis were funny when they were in the background, and now that they're being used for this kind of brazen, audacious humor, they're more like a hilarious cloppy show of force than anything else.
Your sexual world-building clicks well here. I like seeing it even when it doesn't jive with me as a writer, because it just feels right to make such things click with greater ideas about culture and life.
I don't really get the ending of this one.
Octavia is making music in dedication to Stout Heart's penis... just like she promised in the other one. Which chapter in which story had the Flight Lightning clop scene? I can't find it for the life of me...
~SolidFire
Commence read.
Stout still is hiding the Chaos information. That should lead to an interesting conversation, though seems like things are at least being acknowledged by Celestia.