3389419 Maybe. Maybe some folks downvoted for the erotic elements, but this story has deeper issues.
First of all, I downvoted your story. I had a hard time even forcing myself to finish the one chapter I read. It has multiple issues, such as show vs tell, pacing, and descriptions. The opening paragraphs are info dumps that tell me more than I need to know (at this point in the story) about the vampire clans, the world, Dhamphire, ect.
There is an area where I think you are getting downvotes without reads, and that is based on the vampire/ romance elements.
I wish I could offer concrete advise on how to correct the problems I see here, but I have at least tried to tell why I downvoted rather than just saying that I hated it.
3704799 I actually appreciate that and I know that the first chapter is rough. I have been thinking about re writing the whole first chapter but I'm not really sure where to begin. Thank you at least telling me why you downvoted and should you decide to continue reading it to see where it goes and decide to change your vote then please feel free to let me know.
3389419
Maybe. Maybe some folks downvoted for the erotic elements, but this story has deeper issues.
First of all, I downvoted your story. I had a hard time even forcing myself to finish the one chapter I read. It has multiple issues, such as show vs tell, pacing, and descriptions. The opening paragraphs are info dumps that tell me more than I need to know (at this point in the story) about the vampire clans, the world, Dhamphire, ect.
There is an area where I think you are getting downvotes without reads, and that is based on the vampire/ romance elements.
I wish I could offer concrete advise on how to correct the problems I see here, but I have at least tried to tell why I downvoted rather than just saying that I hated it.
3704799
I actually appreciate that and I know that the first chapter is rough. I have been thinking about re writing the whole first chapter but I'm not really sure where to begin. Thank you at least telling me why you downvoted and should you decide to continue reading it to see where it goes and decide to change your vote then please feel free to let me know.
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Goodbye then!
3806229 I'm going to gather that you didn't read much.