More information about what the protagonist is thinking presently would help the reader feel more involved in the story, as would him asking for some more detailed explanations about the world he is now in. That said I'll watch thins and hopefully see it turn in a funny, romantic love triangle haha!
What wrong with Twilight? is she letting her new position go to her head? That is not the way to make friends. is she taking lessons from blue blood? A good chapter and I can't wait for the next one. keep up the good work.
2749016 Yeah, I'm sure a lot of my ideas are pretty unoriginal,but hopefully I'll manage to squeeze a few fresh ones in as I continue to write. Thanks for the support though!
I feel the same way. My story is stuffed full of un-originality, but I'm hoping that my new ones, and the quality of mah writing will hope to blow past it.
What in the hell is wrong with Twilight? Had she been taking lessons from Luna about how to talk in the olden days?
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Haha! You'll see...
The stories like this make my brakes a work that much better
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Awww thanks for the support!
More information about what the protagonist is thinking presently would help the reader feel more involved in the story, as would him asking for some more detailed explanations about the world he is now in. That said I'll watch thins and hopefully see it turn in a funny, romantic love triangle haha!
What wrong with Twilight? is she letting her new position go to her head? That is not the way to make friends. is she taking lessons from blue blood? A good chapter and I can't wait for the next one. keep up the good work.
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Yeah, I'm sure a lot of my ideas are pretty unoriginal,but hopefully I'll manage to squeeze a few fresh ones in as I continue to write. Thanks for the support though!
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I feel the same way. My story is stuffed full of un-originality, but I'm hoping that my new ones, and the quality of mah writing will hope to blow past it.
I will gladly support a writer like me!
Oh just love Rainbow Dash reaction.
Really loving this story atm :D
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Thanks for reading and enjoying. The next chapter should be out soon!
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My guess is... changeling.