Not bad I shall follow and see where this is going.
Oh and first story take this you may need it

2717585 Hey thanks! I'll try to live up to your expectations.

Nice. Great way to start a story. I want to read more of this story.

This is pretty good!

A few mistakes, but for the most part your grammar and such checks out.

I'm sure getting drunk and appearing in Equestria has been used before, and probably quite often, but I'm thinking that your execution (Or how you've written it) is good enough (in my opinion) to look past any pieces of un-originality.

I shall have to read the rest! I hope it doesn't steer away from what I've gotten so far.

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Small World, ain't it?

Oh Boy.

Produced by Donald P. Bellasario

very nice!

Your from PA I'm from NJ, East coast is best coast

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The dense treetops quickly stop all light from reaching the ground as I continue hiking along the path. The whole environment almost immediately transforms from calm to eerie. I hear screeches and other creepy calls coming from the darkness and it sends goosebumps up my arms.

I can just imagine Ian in a horror scenario.

“Boo.”
“AGHH! Fuck you! Wait... Did I do something?”

In a NASA structure, somewhere else...

“Did that asteroid just turn? What... Oh. Oh shit. I should probably call my family now.”