EThe Moon Is Not Made Out Of Cheese!

• MLP: FiM
• Comedy
• Random
• Slice of Life

The day Luna learned why Celestia dislikes Knit Wit so much.

• Luna
• OC

Twilight Glimmer · 1.1k words  ·  369  7 · 4.8k views

Summary:
Knit Wit is back and this time he wants Luna to make him a sandwich out of cheese from the moon. Of course this leads to an annoying situation for Luna, but in opposite to the original story, which was kind of boring, this time the author did a good job. The story is a bit shorter, the jokes a more to the point, made me smile here and there, so overall this story has a better flow and entertainment factor.

Pros:
Where the idea of Kniw Wit comes this time from.
The IQ joke.
Lunas solutions ideas.
Nice ending reference.

Cons:
Well there is not really a con this time, since it is a sequel and it does good on being one. In the first story I pointed out that the main plot is not very interesting, but a sequel has to build up on it, and givin that this story is written more entertaining, I would roll with it.

Rating:
Characters: 7.5/10 Luna fits a bit more for the roll of dealing with Knit Wit I think, also after knowing him from the original story, her stays like he is.
Entertainment Factor: 6/10 Short, sometimes funny.
Story idea: 5/10 Well, generaly spoken, the idea for this story is more or less, Mhh..meh, but, as a sequel it quite fits.

Total 18.5/30 = 6.2/10