Director's cut: The Time Wallflower Blush WISHED She Was Invisible

Oh, where do I start with this one?

I guess I'll start by saying that Wallflower Blush is one of my favorite EQG former antagonists. I’ve been wanting to write a story with her for over a year, but no idea came to me. I had an idea a few months ago where she’d use her “power” of being “invisible'' as a superpower and try to become a superhero, but I dropped it after being unable to think of a story to go with it.

A recent “Sunflower” contest finally sparked the idea for my The Time Wallflower Blush WANTED to Be Invisible” story, but I don’t think this story wouldn’t have qualified for it. This wasn’t a Sunflower story, despite the little Sunflower moments that were in it. Even if it was a true Sunflower story I finished this too late anyway.

At any rate, back to the story itself. I’ve only seen a few Wallflower stories use a comedic touch on how she tended to be forgotten. I’ve never seen one where it was the other way around for one reason or another (I even looked: no Wallflower story I could find did it), so that made the idea for my story perfect. This isn’t the first story I wrote that had a similar premise; I’ve written three others, but they all had romantic implications, but this story didn’t...mostly.

As for that bit of Sunflower, that is, Sunset wanting to kiss Wallflower, I wanted this story to end with some kind of twist. Thus the idea of Sunset actually being in control of herself doing CHS’s great Wallflower Blush hunt was born from that.

It’s a pretty common trope for one of the Twilights (though stories with Sci-Twi doing it seems far less common it seems) to do something with their magic and screw up somehow. For that reason, I chose to leave it ambiguous about if Sci-Twi really messed up with her bracelet or if it was Wallflower’s fault or, as Applejack put it, plumb bad luck.

Next up, the noteworthy cuts and edits I did in this story. This story has possibly the most out of my stories that have between 4,000 and 20,000 words, so I won’t even be able to say them all. I’ll just have to pick the most noteworthy of the noteworthy ones.

The first one, a cut, was to the opening narration. Originally, the narration went on to explain that Wallflower was still being overlooked. However, since the characters went on to basically explain that part of the backstory in their dialogue, I cut it from the narration. There was also a Sunlight joke in the opening narration, in the first draft, where Sunset thought about asking out Wallflower and hoped that it’ll help her see her around more often, but taking it out was one of the first edits I made to the story.

The next edit was to the short scene with Wallflower, Sunset, and Twilight during the first day that Wallflower wore her bracelet. The whole mane 7 was there in the early drafts, but since a couple of them didn’t even have lines, I edited the scene so most of the mane 7 were elsewhere.

Wallflower's immediate reaction to the students fighting over her in CHS’s cafeteria was the third noteworthy edit. Originally, she didn’t try to remove her bracelet and first just tried to get out of there, but her first attempt was one she was away from Principal Celestia and vice-Principal Luna. After a suggestion from TheSleeplessBeholder, I adjusted things so she tried right before chapter one ended. The scene when she tried to get it off in a classroom was also edited to have her trying to do it again. Before the edit, that was where she first tried.

The fourth and last notable edit to the story, the biggest one by far, was to what Princess Twilight did after she successfully got the bracelet off Wallflower’s arm. At first, she asked Wallflower if she wanted her to stick around, Wallflower said it was okay and she just wanted to be alone, then Princess Twi left. However, after I thought about it, that idea left Wallflower unprotected and the effects of the bracelet were still active.

Since that wouldn’t work, I chose to edit it so Princess Twi took Wallflower with her to Equestria for the day. I couldn’t pass on the chance to poke a little fun with the Flashlight ship, so I brought Flash in. What he said about himself and Princess Twi is what I think he would have said in canon, so that wasn’t done in an attempt for comedy. Having Twi want to drink a lot of cider over it was done for laughs, but there was still pony Flash still available for her.

Lastly, for the record, I don’t ship Flashlight, but I don’t hate it either, so it’s something I might poke fun at.

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[ThePinkedWonder]

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Thanks for catching that. I don't proofread my blogs as much as I do stories, but I'm still a little surprised that I missed that error.