May the muffins be forever in your favour."Dreamwalker Dash" Update: Chapter 1 is fully revised and the story will return soon! · 6:26pm Aug 6th, 2019
Today, it's been nearly three months since "Dreamwalker Dash" has been updated the last time. A lot of you probably think that the story is dead. It's not and it will update again and return very soon.
The progress on the revision is going fast now and Chapter 1 has been finished. I know it has been a long time since the last update, but I ask you to keep being patient and stick around for it. I have a very thrilling plot that does a lot of unexpected things in mind that you don't want to miss and that will be worth the long wait.
And to demonstrate you that the revision is indeed moving along, here is a small sneak peek, in honor of Chapter 1's completion. The full chapter in its revised form can only be found on my Patreon, but I wanted to give you a little something to prove that the revision is making progress:
“Greetings, Rainbow Dash.” The alicorn smiled down at the tired mare friendly. “There is no crisis happening, don't worry. I am here for a different purpose tonight.”
“And what's this purpose?” Rainbow Dash followed up on the question with a strong yawn. No crisis for Equestria meant she should close the door, ignore the princess and slip back into her bed. Only politeness kept her from doing that.
“Yesterday, my sister and I have been sitting together to discuss how we can ensure that all of our duties will be in good hooves after our retirement. There are a lot of things Twilight Sparkle can take care of, but Celestia and I both agreed that we need a pony more suited than her to take over my work in the dreams of ponies. And I think you are the right pony for this job, Rainbow Dash.”
The yawn got stuck in Rainbow Dash's throat halfway through. She stared at the princess with an open mouth for a couple of seconds, before she finally closed it and answered.
“Me? Why would you want me for this job?”
Luna cocked her head. “Why?” she asked. “A few days ago, you were very eager to take on this responsibility, so I am surprised to see you reacting like this.”
“Well, yeah.” Rainbow Dash screwed up her face. “But I wasn't completely serious about this. I mean, of course it would be awesome to see the dreams of other ponies. Especially if they dream about me.” She grinned.
“But there's already other stuff I have to take care of. I'm a full-time member of the Wonderbolts and have to be fit for training every day. And I have my classes at Twilight's school. Sorry, but I can't fit becoming a dreamwalker into all of this.” Her head got lowered slightly and a flash of regret appeared in her eyes. It stayed for a few seconds, before she gave the princess a quizzical look. “And my reaction from a few days ago isn't the only reason why you made me this offer, is it?” she followed up her rejection with a question.
“No, of course not!” Princess Luna laughed. “I have observed you, Rainbow Dash. In the years since my return from the moon and since I was freed of Nightmare Moon's control, I have learned that you have quite the reputation among foals all over Equestria.”
“And?” Rainbow Dash interrupted, not understanding the princess' point.
“And I think this will be very helpful for my dreamwalking duties.” Luna smirked. “I help all ponies of Equestria with their nightmares and the afflictions that cause them. But I encounter most of these nightmares in the minds of foals, for it is the young ones who often deal with the most severe of struggles. These foals trust me as their guardian and I need a successor whom they will trust just as much.”
Luna stepped forward and put a hoof on Rainbow Dash's chest, in a solemn manner. “You, Rainbow Dash, carry a name that is known all over Equestria. The foals of Ponyville already admired you before you became a Wonderbolt and since then, this admiration has become extended to foals who live in every corner of the kingdom. They look up to you and this will create the necessary foundation to earn their trust as their new dream guardian.”
Rainbow Dash's face had become lit up more and more during the explanation by the princess. She looked down at her hoof, then back into her face. “Yeah, you're right. I think they would trust me, but I don't think that I can do this.”
The new rejection resulted in more surprise getting built up on Luna's face. “And why not?” she asked. “I have seen you, Rainbow Dash, you handle foals very well. The young ones like you for more than just your flight skills and career.”
Rainbow Dash rubbed over the backside of her head. “Maybe, but..... I just don't think I can handle more duties than I already have. If I'm dreamwalking at night, between being a Wonderbolt and Twilight's school, I won't be fit enough to do any of my other jobs.”
The surprise in Luna's face vanished as her mind finally comprehended the reason for Rainbow Dash's reservation.
“Can you see it now?” Rainbow Dash removed Luna's hoof from her chest. “There's no way I can do this. I'd like to, I really do. But I can't sleep during the day like you do. I worked hard to be a flier for the Wonderbolts and I won't give this up.” Her eyes became stern.
“I understand, Rainbow Dash. And I do not expect from you to give up any duties that you enjoy. But allow me to put your worries to rest.” She gave Rainbow Dash a reassuring smile.
“See, when I enter other ponies' dreams, it is something I have to do while being awake. But for you, there is a different possibility, one that allows your body to rest because you will dreamwalk in your sleep.”
“Okay, I admit, that does sound awesome.” Rainbow Dash sighed. “But how would I do this? I'm not an alicorn and neither a unicorn. I don't have a horn to cast magic with.” She tapped on her rainbow mane while looking at the princess in a puzzled manner.
To explain this, I am not completely rewriting each chapter in this revision. It's a touch-up I'm doing, not a rewrite. The plot stays the same, but I improve the narrative and the dialogues.
And, to emphasize this again, please don't assume this story is dead. It's far away from that and will return very soon. The wait will be worth it, both for the revised chapters and the future chapters.
Stay easy as a filly!
~ Fluttercheer
Looking forward to it! Though I will miss the original version
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The original version will still be there, for the most part. The chapter is slightly longer and I fixed a lot of flaws in the narrative and the dialogues that resulted from putting out the chapters too quickly. But the plot will remain the same. You won't lose any scenes that you like.
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That's very nice of you!