My first multi-chapter story (and, so, my first Incomplete story...!)

So, I got kind of stuck on the two stories I'm working on, and then chanced upon the Season 9 Bingo Writing Contest, and noticed there were a few days left until the deadline, so... I figured, why not?

And, luckily, the prompt card I got suggested a story to me straight away to incorporate all five - I was very lucky!

Anyhow. Errors is my first multi-chapter story, and I'm hoping to have it finished, Complete, in the next couple of days with either three or four more chapters (depending on how I work the remaining text into shape); if you spot any huge, um, errors, please do flag 'em up!

And don't worry, the promised stories - crazy Luna dreamworld adventure, and thumpin' pumpin' disco boogie Manehattan club scene SoL thing - are very much still in the works, I'm just trying to beat them into shape before submission.