A sneak peak at the upcoming Homecoming entry: · 11:38pm Dec 30th, 2018
Just because I like the idea, and to give you some idea of the process. I'm not going to post any chapters on this till it's done and edited.
This snippet does require some knowledge of past stories, so I'm tucking it behind the spoiler blackout.
I nudged a primary feather to the side. In the last month, I had gotten a lot better at preening, despite some elaborate teasing from Sunshine. I wasn’t perfect at it, especially since this was the longest I had gone with my wings present. Usually, when I manifested them on the human side of the mirror they were already preened.
“So, why don’t you just use your magic?” Tempest asked as she sipped some of the tea set out. “It seems that it would be faster and more accurate than using your nose and tongue.”
“I just got used to it.” I plucked a stripped feather from near the alula with a brief wince. “When I started doing this I didn’t exactly have great use of magic at my disposal.”
She grunted. She was still wearing a crystalline cast around her horn, the ice blue material now carved in a natural shape for a horn, giving her a way to control her magic in a slightly more controlled manner. “And you aren’t having your wife do it why?”
I felt my face turn bright red. “Wings are a bit…sensitive. Sunshine found it extremely amusing to tease the more responsive spots when she was helping me.”
“Sensitive, eh?” The plum mare smirked as she lifted her cup again in a silvery aura. “Is that why you were late to the inspection today?”
The heat in my face didn’t dim, and I felt my wings stiffen a little as I recalled momentarily just what had caused me to run late the final check of the house reconstruction. “Like I said,” I muttered. “She likes to tease.”
I bit down hard on a keratin sheath to free a feather while Tempest laughed, her throaty chuckle just keeping the blush on full heat.
Now all I have to do is figure out what to do with a certain pony's cutie mark.
Looks like fun, though I would suggest a rework of this sentence:
Using control and controlled in the same sentence feels repetitious. Maybe
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This is a rough draft. There will be a lot of changes likely
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Ah, drat, i was hoping this was another great story ready to go but for a coat of polish.
As to cutie mark, have you considered none? Since a cutie mark is a symbol of one's talent, how would the loss of one's horn before you discovered your talent affect that? Is a cutie mark destiny, or is it shaped by one's life? Is it possible to have no mark as you never discovered your talent?