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Here it is. Enjoy this cluster[BEEP] of a one-shot. XD

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[The Great Derpsby]

I didn't want to put this under the actual story, and I apologise if this comes across as hostile. Okay, here goes:

A bit too much with the character shilling. That got in the way of the actual romance, since at some point it felt more that it exists to stroke Stardust's ego and deny his flaws than anything. I don't understand why all the characters (except those you, the author, don't like) are so in awe and gush about him so much. He's a prick to everyone here, except Cadance. He treats all the others like dirt.

There should be a point at which someone goes "I respect your accomplishments, but you, sir, are a jerk of the highest order. Please stay away from me."

Is that always with Stardust in your stories? Was the Equestria Girls one a fluke where being a jerk to everyone accidentally gave Stardust a bad reputation?

Again, I'm sorry. I won't be bothering you any more after this. But, I probably won't be reading anything else with Stardust in it. It's just... well, when he's around, internal logic seems to go out the window to make him look good. That, and vent at characters who don't deserve it. Poor Flash.

[Darkwing Dust]

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Fair enough. Thank you for your honesty. Truth be told I was worried about something like that while writing the story. A valuable lesson to be learnt for next time, appreciated.

[Darkwing Dust]

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I feel like I was trying too hard to justify why Stardust is worthy of someone like Cadence.

[The Great Derpsby]

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Thank your for taking my comment so well. I was debating internally whether to delete it, afraid it might not be helpful and too aggressive.

And I should also say, I could see the romantic spark between them. That was there.

[Darkwing Dust]

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I always welcome criticism, so long as it isn't intentionally mean-spirited.