Eye rape for you! · 2:48am Jul 2nd, 2017
This is probably one of the worst authors I have found. And here is her story.
The Ones you don't see
You see, when I saw this story, I was about to skip over it until I saw all the down Votes. I was so curious I had to check it out.
And then, I saw this abomination.
I respond with very helpful advice.
Ok, when I first saw the story I was like Why The Down Votes? It seems good enough.
And then I read this.
Now, I am not a very good writer, but I know a good story when I see one. This was not very good.
And no it wasn't about the topic, the topic is a very good one, and I like the idea.
Here is what I didn't like.
The pacing was very, very, very fast. I doubt Sonic could out-run it.
We have two zebras who come to Ponyville. Fine and dandy. The same day they come, they suddenly decide to build a mosque and basically force every pony to hear about their God? No no. Refugees/immigrants (usually) don't do that, they meet with other Muslims and pray in homes as a make-shift Mosque. They won't tell others about their religion unless they are missionaries or someone asks them about it. Also, you mainly showed the haters and what they think about this. You didn't give them a backstory on why they feel that way. You very rarely showed the ponies who supported the refugees.
Also, Rainbow dash!? You made her a ring-leader? Seriously!? Rainbow wouldn't do that, she has a GRYPHON friend for crying out loud.
If anything, Applejack would make more sense. I feel like I should have to explain myself.
And the names are very strange. I do not believe Zebras would have names like that, but hey, it's your characters.
Overall, while it is a good topic and I am proud you tackled something as complex as this, I feel like you executed it poorly. Try to slow down, give backstory to everything, take your time, make it more believable. Please. Thank you for reading this.
You would think the author would accept and thank for this, but no. She (he, it?) Responded very immaturely.
rainbow dash is a character in the show who WOULD do this. also the story was made VERY good and the pacing is not to fast at all. i have editors look at it and they said it was amazing. do you not like it because i showed muslims in a good light? is that why? seems like most people here disliked it because of THAT reason and nothing else!
This. This is what I am talking about.
And so, WINDLIFE, you ought to be ashamed of yourself, claiming that this story is very good and that we are giving hate and racist speech. This person probably was always told that they were wonderful by mommy and daddy who created this little sin-spawn. It is people like this who I can't stand.
This is a rant. Sorry for it.
Chaos out!
No use dealing with those kinds of people. They will get offended no matter how constructive and mature your comment is. Wildflower seems like a egocentric jerk from when I checked his/her blogs. All you can do is laugh at it.
M'kay, I was part of the badfic community a while back. T'was fun, met some new authors who became my friends, honed my reviewing skills.
This was a while ago, but Wildlife's a user I remember.
He's a troll.
Or some form of a troll.
He's also pretty amazing. You can see the trolling pretty evidently in his reply to you, what with the choices of capitalization.
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I'm pretty sure, but this creature is also a sin-spawn from hell that should not be a on here.
It's also a girl, at least their boyfriend try-hard said so.
4590118 Right, right, forgot about that…
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I already reported them. *Evil smile* my first report!
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wow! i can see more haters around here! wont take long to tell my fans that you are harassing me!!
4590803 You.
You are awesome.
Never stop.
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I know! I try to be.
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Go ahead. Be my guest. In fact, the thing is you intentialy looked through my blogs to find what I said and started yelling at me and my friends and threatened us. Who's harassing who now?
(And I can't spell apparently)
Your game