The Story isn't finished, here are some thoughts · 1:45am Oct 19th, 2016
The Great Dictator isn't done, I still have to post those last 3 chapters and epilogue but, before that, I would like to ask: What you have liked so far?
I mean, the few comments I get always says that "this is unique" or "I've never seen anything like this before", granted, I would like to know how long they have been here and how many stories they have read to say that. What I would like to know is how unique you found my story? What elements did you find original and how well did I accomplished them? How did you found the characterization? the pacing?
I would like to know on further details because I'm already planning on writing stories to expand this world I've just created by making the tyrants I've mentioned on my stories being an example of other types of dictators my country have gotten.
I've also read the book "The Road of El Dorado"/"El Camino de EL Dorado" and I'm seeing if I can make a story with that and use it for this world or use it in another story I'm planning (that has gotten some advances).
SO, I would like to know, what could be improved or what could be salvaged?
Also, did you liked the music choice I used in the fic?
Thank you for reading and have a nice day.
Story's quite nice, Theirs not a lot of story's involving people taking over the Crystal empire though I wonder how your going to finish this in the epilogue.
The documentary prospective is original and I enjoy it quite a bit. Though I feel that it also kinda takes a bit away from the Main character, since we don't know him as personally, but rather from someone elses point of view.
I would enjoy seeing a "road to El Dorado" version, maybe somehow involve Swift Rise or something in it.
i have to agree with deeed22 on some points and at first part of me thought this story isnt interesting and dropbear will get butthurt over and and wants it banned and like 2 days ago or so and i have to say that your story is quite good and unique in the way it is written i am kinda hoping for a sequel or something now
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Thank you, the documentary was for that, so people could see him but know him. That way some aspects of the story can be left to speculation so, in the end, it's up to you what you think happened (like, do you believe Swift Rise killed Pure Diamond?).
Also, typo, it isn't "Road to El Dorado", it's "Road OF El Dorado". It was a book written by Arturo Uslar Pietri that shows a Spanish expedition into the Amazonian Rainforest in the search of the omaguas (an indian tribe that, was hoped to be, lived on the mythical city of El Dorado) and how bad that ended up (Hint: Search of for Lope de Aguirre). Remember, I'm still debating where should that story end up, because I'm planning to use Griffons on that one.