Apr
9th
2016
Honest criticism · 10:59am Apr 9th, 2016
I've noticed a lot of downvotes from latest story and i just want to know what's the cause so i can improve as a writer.
1. Is it the grammar, I'm no editor i freely admit that i had a friend look it over he said it was fine and i couldn't find an editor because it was taking a while and i got over excited publishing it. If so i will take the time and try my best to re-edit before finding a editor to do a proper job.
2. If its something else please tell me be brutally honest i want to improve so don't be afraid of my feelings or other crap just tell me what i fucked up and I'll try my best to fix it.
Please and thank you for any criticism
Don't let it discourage you. Even the comments they gave were pretty average. I think it's because you are trying to write what is already a popular story concept (Fallout Equestria), I can only assume readers will try to hold you to a specific standard.
Just so you can call them trolls?
Well, I bet some dislikes were just because it is FoE, and the others were because the story is not very well written, the characters are not kinda believeble, and of course, "Luna's loyalist" and stuff won't give any of this positive. Do you know how many people with no ife at all who simply adore Luna and put the fantasy of being with her in their fics? With, of course, unique and dramatic characters with superpowers and stuff?
I'm willing to be your prereader for your Fallout: Equestria story. Try asking around for help if you need it. I'll be honest though, it's mostly just you making your I's lowercase when it should be uppercase.
3858613 yeah i thought it might have been that but it didn’t want to automatically assume it was angry fanboys or something
3859013 thanks
3859165
Well Oozelock had a small point. Because the majority of Luna fans are often as he described, it creates a preexisting notion. So this story will be a bit of an uphill battle but keep trying.
3858733 no i actually want to hear criticism. So can explain how its horribly written i would like to hear how i can i improve and how i could executed this idea better. I know we have clashing ideals but i would like to hear every perspective
3859504 thanks and honestly that's how i wanted to paint some of the c.o.n angry luna fanboys who attack other for difference in ideals not all of them just some forces in it
DarkStar709 might b a help!
3860694 an editor?
3861161 yea!
3861614 thanks