Intermission X Now edited

Thanks to some sharp spot on criticism about the recent intermission I have gone back and rewritten/added to the recent intermission

I don't know if I got it better or not... I don't have a pre reader/editor so I don't have someone to tell me "what the?" until afterwards and it has happened alot in DoH and AtToH that I fix or at least attempt to fix/mediate issue that are brought up in later chapters...

In this case it was awful... so much that I quickly went back and made corrections... there is about a 400 word difference and I changed good sections of the intermission so please reread it...