That thing I was talking about for the past two monthly updates. · 2:27am Mar 16th, 2015
So for those who still remember that thing I mentioned I was doing to help the process of writing the next chapter, and even those who don't I guess...
Well, I'm going to show it to you guys.
It's a "technique" I call the stupid chapter.
It was basically me forcing myself to forget about making this thing beautiful, polished, or even readable in any way; focusing instead on putting down the exact progression of events I had in mind in a minimalist, condensed fashion.
That way, instead of having to think about
-making things neat and readable,
-keeping characters in character,
-making sure the current sentence/paragraph/line flowed from the last and lead to the next,
All at once for every word I managed to spit onto the page, I only had to do that last one. That way I only had to go back and re-write every section by itself, one-by one, without worrying too much about the step I had already taken with each; allowing me to focus more intently on each paragraph on an individual basis. I didn't have to find the words that would lead to the next question, I only needed those who lead to the next answer. The path was traced, I only had to pave it.
And while some minor details still changed even while turning the stupid chapter into the good one, it did help quite a bit.
So without further ado, here's chapter twelve of MViaH, Stupid Version (minus the first few paragraphs where I hadn't yet begun to do the dumb version), in all its completely retarded, probably-only-intelligible-to-me glory:
(Just after Lock says Dave won't suicide)
“bluh you guys are right”
Key: “wow youre good Lock”
Lock “Pshyeh, work for a doc and you lern stuffz”
Two douches take 1 step forward, dave steps back and !!cliff!! oh noes! (Just scary, not fall)
Waiiiiiiiiiit
Twi, rain and pinks debarquent, curve in road and rock hide until last second
Panic level up!
Twi: We need to talkz
L&K: Eyyy Lmao bby we gots this
Twi: Ohnoyoudidn’t.jpeg, To Dilver; how the shiznits d’you rekt me scrub?
Dave: Sorrysorrysorry
Twi: yeah but how? Tha shit was totes imposs, brah (cos shit be mind-tazer for crazy peeps(mo’like “turn on the ‘you slepp U don’t move’ part of da brain)
Dilver: Tshyeah, cos I don’t sleepz, even when he does.
WHatevz: Whatcha mean? You’re silver, who’s he, etcctetctet
Dave: no I’m not, it’z what I’s tellin’ ya! I just got here
L&K: Boy clearly be cray-cray, yo! (interrupted)
Pinkerz: Wait, X time ago? (check breath and tail, and megahappy) FINALLY!
*pinkwarp to dilver, warp-hug, superpinkiepartyplanningbullshitmode
Twi: WTF dr. pinksterz, u believe that?
Pink: Yeppers peppers, twilers. Pinkiie sense. Looking for da guy fo’days and now it stopped.
Twi: Oh, okay, that’s something to consider
Rain: Serioux?
L&K: Yeah, let’s just bring him back to a doctor (Interrupted)
WAAAAAAAAAAAIIIIIIIIIIT
Guardses arrivent aussi.
Guard chief: Okay boisandgirls, cliff party over! Y’all go back home before I slam all y’all. Charges for everyone! Tapage nocturne all; loitering; and assault for dilver
Panic overload; vomm mode engaged
Twi: thankz policeboy, let’s all go back quek’part de moins bullshit and (interrupt)
Popo: that’s for you too, miss
STTango: Whaaa
Popo: yep, yall aint above the LAW
Rain: Twi! Abuse your authority
Twi: can som1 do something about the sick guy on edge of cliff?!?!
Silver wake up
Silv: ULTIMATE WTF
Dave: oh yeah, recap
Silv: YOU WHAT
Rain: U WOT M8!!!
Popo: Aha, confession
L&K: can we just bring
EVREYONE: NO!
Key: aww
Pause
Tout’l’monde parle en meme temps (Haha, Pas besoin d’ecrire l’dialogue)
Popo: Screw it, arrest ERRYBODAY!
Baston, 2 dudes comin’at’Silv
Back off, hind legs down, turn around and goat style
End at new WWWWAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIITTTTTTTTTTTTTT!!!
...I can't believe how much I devolve into insultingly stereotypical gangsta slang when I force myself to refuse to care. I'm not even black, damnit.
Also, please excuse the few bits of french peppered in there; writing an english piece of text doesn't entirely prevent my first language from seeping into my thoughts.
And I also can't believe I seriously wrote "yeppers peppers, Twilers" at some point in my life.
Yeah. Anyway. That's more than enough blorghs for one month. see ya in April or something.
byotiful
A beautiful simplistic writing style, just like Ernest Hemingway.
Get yourself ready for that Nobel, Destructor.
... This is more funny then watching someone hurt themself on purpose.
I want to read a full length story written like this.
laughing so hard
can't
what is this
Oh my God, it's beautiful. It's like you got a bunch of Redditors to write a synopsis of the chapter for you.
I'm currently having trouble writing a story (not mlp related) that I have the outline of in my head but keep getting held up by writers block when it comes to the details. This seems like an excellent way of getting over that, so I hope you won't mind if I borrow this technique.
That's... That's so Pinkie Pie..
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Hey
It works perfectly
IGN:10/10
That... actually seems like an interesting tactic. I'll have to try it out
This is the best thing. You're English is great too, seeing as you know how to abuse it and still make sense.
To the Writing Guide with it! NAO
...You could write an amazing trollfic using this style!
Dooo eeeeeet!
YES!