After the End #5. It's all over! Fic debrief. · 8:22pm Oct 5th, 2014
Ahahahaha, you would not believe how long or much effort it took to get this one out the gate.
At 5600-ish words though, I guess it was worth it! Told you the finale would shape up to around 10k words.
Honestly I had no idea this fic was going to last me until frikken October. As I've said before, it started life as a two-shot, and almost spiralled into a bit of a monster.
Is it the best fic I've ever written? No. Why? Because it's my first 1st person fic. There's probably loads still wrong with it, but I have been getting some rather wonderful harsh but fair feedback along the way, which has helped me to no end.
My only regret is that I gained only around maybe 10 or so followers from it, but hey, that's life.
So what's next for me? Well since I'm still vastly inexperienced in 1st person writing and I consider it inferior to 3rd person, you'd be mad you think I have another one lined up. And you're right! But I do! And it's my own story this time around! And this one has humans too....no wait...come back! It'll be good! I swear! It'll have Luna!
Much love everyone. Thanks for reading. Onwards and upwards eh?
-Door Matt
I think overall the story was good, but one thing I think will be found lacking in it is resolution to the conflict. Sure, we saw Celestia was perturbed. Sure she initially said no to Jason's demands for punishment (though she knew he was under Discord's influence, so this point may be mood). We know that loads of humans got transported to Equestria, and that he went somewhere else.
The thing about dark fics is that the resolution is just as important as the conflict itself, if not more so. In these fics, people have questions that they want answers. "Is justice ultimately served in some form?" is obviously one of the bigger questions, and the smaller questions being context-dependent. Obviously the answer to the question of justice doesn't have to be strictly "yes" or even "no". But the question should be answered nonetheless.
I would suggest an epilogue, in third-person form. You don't even have to answer what happened to Jason, just say "No one has seen or heard from Jason since." Just something to think about.