I have reached an impasse, dood. · 1:13am Jul 5th, 2014
After this weekend, I'll see what it looks like and if the 'Nah's have it... I'll rewrite Chapter 13 to have no humans and pretend that Ponies were people shaped since forever, dood. I literally had no idea I'd rustle so many jimmies by doing this... and in all honesty... it really isn't worth one chapter of Twilight fucking some random human chick, dood.
Also, House Sparkle itself has being running me ragged, it isn't JUST the human thing that has me tired, it's more of me jumping back and forth between House, and Misadventures, and whatever else I'm playing with, dood. And with House Sparkle I have a tendency to "Bite off more than I can chew" and I... need help with it.
I have two options, dood. Three but I don't want to cancel House Sparkle so it's only two, dood. Give House Sparkle up to someone that CAN write a thrilling tale of how Futa Twilight runs a business and a province, dood. Or... have someone co-write it with me? Sorta like with the Proof-reading I ask you guys to help me with but... the co-writer would be able to add things to the story and help build something out of the wreck I made, dood. I do not want people that are already busy with other important stuff like other stories, dood. So... if you are interested, PM me and we'll... find a way to chat through PMs or Skype or whatever, dood.
I really did it this time, at least my pride isn't too big for me to swallow, dood. Sorry if this screams bad news to anyone... I guess I'm just... getting overwhelmed, dood. (This may also mean that Gigavolt might go from Hiatus to cancelled as well since It's pretty clear I'm not touching that again, dood.)
EDIT: (Up to me... is basically me rolling a six sided die, where two numbers are for no, and four are for yes because I still want an excuse for people ponies but I'm not sure if it's worth the ONE sex scene I want to write involving a futa pony and some random human, dood.)
Truthfully adding humans did seem odd since noone talked of them before or even had any mention (as far as I remember) until this chapter. Not that I minded but i would have liked some hint that they were around...maybe I jsut missed it, I don't know. Also by the sound of it Humans pretty much dominated the world and it took all or most of the races coming together to stop them, which seemed a bit odd but maybe that's jsut me as well.
2258417 I am pretty sure I mentioned ponies being ponies once before but eventually became anthromorphs... someone asked about that and I said 'humans', dood. But it might have been a silly decision... like a lot of things I do, dood.
Can't you just put one of the stories on hiatus so you can focus one story for now and work on the other one later? This way you won't have so much on your plate.
2258424 I see, then that would raise a question about weather or not the royal sisters (Celestia and Luna) are still ponies and if not did the two lines come together long before the alicorn sisters (or alicorns depending on how you want your history to be) rise to power? Also I still have a slightly hard time believing that Humans could pretty much take on the entire world and win until they all came together. To me it would have made more sense if the Humans had been in conflict with another nation and it kind of snowballed from there with different factions joining a side and potentially switching sides until either an accord was made between several leaders or some other event happened....but then again this is only my opinion and you can take it or leave it as you will.
2258426 I put Gigavolt on indefinite Hiatus and if I was going to put another on Hiatus... it'll probably be House Sparkle, dood.
Honestly, the idea of having humans in House Sparkle especially with the lack of logic in the back story for them simply doesn't justify the ONE sex scene in any respect the only way it would is if there was more than the one, and by that I mean they pretty much were there EVERY FUCKING CHAPTER afterwards. Because as it stands... no, just no... there's no justification for it and it seems like just an excuse and something that shouldn't of happened.
Especially since House Sparkle is from what I can tell meant to be a SERIOUS-ISH story... meaning that if something is just thrown in their with an excuse... well it doesn't belong.
2258466 I think there was another reason other than one sex scene or to explain why ponies are bipeds now... but it escapes me at the moment, dood.
I really don't have an excuse, at this time, dood.
2258477 And that is why their existance in the story is completely not only unjustified but, is causing such an uproar from what I can tell. THEY MAKE NO SENSE IN THE SERIOUS STORY! Now if this was the story where making sense was a sin like in misadventures... well then there's likely you'd get a pass but, they're only normal ponies there.
Meaning My good Prinny, that you hath messed up royal and you deserve a 100,000 hel fine.
2258479 God, dammit... took me years to get that much, dood.
2258491 Eh them's the breaks, now pay the fine or I'll send the most villainous creatures the netherworld has to offer after you... Lawyers.
2258506 Okay, dood... Jeez, no mercy for the poor prinny... he adds humans with little hint of them and BAM... everyone gets made and rips me a new assholes, dood.
2258513 You seem to forget the fact that doing so in any serious setting is writing's greatest sin and something MLP fans have had to deal with already and are still scared by?
2258529 Yeah... I guess that's pretty much why I'm now asking for help, dood.
2258546 Well I'd be willing to help if you don't mind me having to deal with life in between stuff.
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I that seems like a good idea. This story is way different compared to Misadventures. There are too many changes in house sparkle AU that requires lots of attention to make the story make sense. Sure the lemon is good but if there is no story or plot development that make sense, then well... it is no better then a poor, cheap ass porn video with amateurs in it. All i'm saying is House Sparkle is a great story and i can't wait to read more of it, but this story is going to require your full attention and has a lot more ground to work on to make this story grow.
2258576 Just send me a PM of things you would like happen later on in the story... it looks like I'm rewriting the new chapter anyway, dood.
2258586 I'll send it over the weekend, gonna re-read the entire story and see if I can't figure out how to make everything make sense.
Like 2258578 said, this story requires a lot of careful thought to make any sense and it's definitely not something you can use to get from lemon to lemon like misadventures. It's a story, sure it's a story with heavy nsfw themes in it. But... still a story.
Seems to me you better put this story out of its misery and delete it outright.
I haven't read it, but judging by the comments here, it would seem that this story is your Frankinstine abomination from Hell.
Considering I have not read it however, that claim might be complete utter bull. If that is the case, you may hang me by Celestia's eyebrows.
2259134 It started out okay, but the latest chapter caused a shitstorm when I added the possibility of humans being in the story as the reason why the ponies are now bipeds, dood.
2259136 It would be appear to be due to not stating their origin stories early.
If you did, then perhaps this would not have happened. All you can do from here is damage control and give your best reason for why they are anthro in the first place. Perhaps do an extinction event where the humans die off and only anthro ponies remain.
2259145 I might be rewriting Chapter 13 anyways... so I could do that, dood.
2259150 I have only this to say.
Boop
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2259163 My response is groaning in annoyance and rubbing my beak, dood... bopping is weird to us Prinnies, dood.
I think the story is just fine.
The fact that you included humans is not bad or anything. The story behind them was pretty good to be honest
In that case then...
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GRENADE!!!
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(I have no life. I am easily amused. Jack is dull boy.)
I hereby forbid you from ever giving up on House Sparkle :p
And I wouldn't mind helping with the story, but I'm too lenient. I didn't mind that humans popped out of nowhere.
I say that its up to you, afterall you are the one writing. If you feel they have a place in the story then they have a place in it.
I am not for or against because:
It would be fun to see how you would play out this history and such. And in that same area, the story has proven itself not to be dependend on any factor other then Twi's messed up life.
So it can go either way.
The fact that you care about people bitching at your creative work is unnerving. Especially by this point.
If I were you, I'd just get the scene over with and continue on; but I'm not you, 'cause I can't write.
I read your shit 'cause I like the way you write, and the content of the stories you write. Which happen to contain Twilight with a penis, and politics, and dramady.
2259390 I care too much about other people's opinions about my stupid stuff, dood.
2259383 It's still comes down to a 'was it worth it?' scenario, dood. It doesn't feel worth it.
2259523 Unfortunatly... i have a hard time ignoring other people so I can't just 'drop' it, dood. I wish I was proud enough.
Well, you know where I stand. I was warned in my own story that people were getting frustrated with a plot point that I kept teasing, but would not yet reveal. The commenter (I won't mention a name, but he is one of the writers I respect) said that I was in danger of losing my audience, so I followed their advice and revealed it... leaving me with no big reveal at the end, which was another ten chapters away.
It's hard to know when to follow advice, and when to ignore it. Like I said in your story's comments, in the end, it's your story. You know where it's going. You know how it's getting there. Ultimately, it's your decision. There's no shame in seeking help when you feel overwhelmed. I would like to have seen how the sex scene would have went, but I understand that you feel it's not worth the backlash you're going through. Know that I'll be happy to help with the proofreading as usual. It's just a shame I'm only three chapters away from ending my current story. If I weren't so far along, I'd put it on hiatus to take House Sparkle over for you.
2259898 Yeah... I'm considering redoing the chapter to make Griffon's take the humans place in the war and make the shit hit the fan that way, dood.