GAHHH I CAN'T TAKE IT ANYMORE! *Major Lazarus update please read* · 7:57pm Mar 21st, 2014
I can't leave it be... I must... I just... I just have to do it! For three days made my way through Lazarus: The Rise of Man previous chapters... and ahhh! How can you people read this shit! So many spelling errors, the characters now that I actually look at it are bland and boring (Save for the German Doctor he is cool... but that's because I made him that way) well... not entirely bland but Jesus they're boring... so I have to do it!
I already started with the first chapter, and if you haven't seen the update in the description, I'm officially rewriting ALL OF IT! The chapters will try to remain mostly the same, maybe a few different ones will sprout up. But after reading my own story and surfing through the comment section, I see the most of you are right. The chapters that did well like the rewrite for first contact. Will probably go untouched if not just slightly tweaked, other than that the prologue with stay how it is. The first chapter along with two three and so on, will be completely re-done.
Honestly I might even drop a few unneeded characters, or just give them less screen time (I'm talking as if it's a T.V. show or movie ha-ha.) but I am in fact writing character bios for the main or major recurring characters. Might even throw in a few extra pony chapters (because they're the whole spot light of the story.) I'm also redoing the entire plot line of the story, everything is changing, I'm completely rebuilding this story from it's previous ashes.
Also a few pre-readers would be great when I finish rewriting the first chapter again...
Now just to re-summarize, I'm redoing the old chapters they're be a shit ton of character development to make the humans more interesting. Johnny Conway, A.K.A Central, (Who was originally intended to be the main character.) Will now be officially the main character along side, Commander William Carter, Nelson Grimes, and Angela Greene.
I hope you guys are cool with this, and please, please have an American Day.
I can help if you want
I live and breathe Sci-Fi. How can I help?
1944378 That'd be great, I'll PM you whenever I get one out (letting you know 1st hand I'm slow, so give me time.)
1944391 Whenever you see me writing or doing something that makes no fucking sense, I want you smack me like one of your whores and make me do it right... oh shit... why did I just say that?
Okay serious mode now, since the story is sci-fi fantasy sense it's MLP you can't make that full blown sci-fi. I would like to know if you could pre-read it and if I'm doing something that doesn't make that much sense, I would like it if you could possibly help me rearrange it or give suggestions on how to make it seem more realistic. Again like a said since it's still technically fantasy we can't make it too realistic.
1944417 Sure id love to pre-read for you; just PM me whenever you have a chapter for me to read.
1944417 Okly dokly
1944417 I volunteer as pre-reader tribute! ...If that is ok with you...
1944725 Of course you can help.
1944981 Danke schön
1944983 You're welcome.
Two things:
1. If you do not absolutely love your story, then do what you must to make it so. The story is your child, treat it as such.
2. I volunteer.
1945880
True, the story is my child and the first kid was a birth defect that I don't want.
Secondly, Perfect!
1945888 But of course. PM me when you are ready, good sir.
1944987 So, where can I get the chapters to edit (when they are written, that is)?
1954957 I'll send them to you through Gdocs, and as I told a previous person. "I'm a slow writer, so it may take some time." Not to mention I got me hands on Dark Souls 2 and I'm addicted.
1955539 Do you need an intervention?
1955601 This may sound dumb, but what do you mean by "Intervention?" are you talking about editing? If so I prefer to hand it over to my helpers when I finish.
1955686 An intervention is something that helps people get over addictions.
1957255 Why thank you for informing *Yeah I learned something!*
And no thank you, this game is too great.
1957533 In that case, can I get one of those fancy gaming doo-dads?
1957786 Just go to your local game store, buy Dark Souls 2 and just play for hours on end locked away in that room where ever you play games...