Unnamed
A poem by GhostWriter17
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What's in a name?
Golden armour glitters in the sun.
What's in a name?
Selfless deeds we perform for our Goddesses.
What's in a name?
Strength in numbers, pride in our undying hearts.
What's in a name?
We give our lives in the name of Equestria.
What's in a name?
Country is our motivation, family where our souls lie.
What's in a name?
A life-long service, dutifully carried out.
Whats in a name?
Respect is what we aim for, but sometimes we are not given it.
Whats in a name?
Brothers in arms, a bond unbreakable.
Whats in a name?
Sisters are by our side, deserving of equal respect.
Whats in a name
Earthen ones give strengthening walls.
Whats in a name
They serve like walls, stoic and forceful.
Whats n a name
Horned ones are majestic, fantastical.
Whats n a name
From shields to projectiles, they perform miracles.
Whats n a name
Then there are the winged brethren.
What n name
They fly, survey, attack.
What n name
Beautiful, fluttering feathers touching the breeze.
What n name
Maneuverability and endless grace, they are perfect.
What n name
How I envy them.
What n name
Flightless.
What n name
Unable to serve my Goddesses.
What name
Name?
What name
My dream, unfulfilled.
What name
Diseased and shamed.
What ame
How I long to don the royal armour.
What ame
But frailty shatters my hopes.
What ame
Do I not deserve a better fate such as this?
Wat ame
Can I not save myself from darkness?
Wat ame
Is my destiny to die unloved?
Wat ame
In this facility, I lie awake, barely.
Wat ame
Facility? More like a prison.
Wat ame
I cannot leave, cannot move.
Wat ame
Here I am a number.
at ame
I am but a statistic.
at ame
They know it's but a matter of time.
at ame
A matter of time until the end.
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What shall become of me?
at me
Pain is all I know.
at me
Do my Goddesses know of my existence?
at me
Or are they numbed by seeing death countless times?
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My date is coming.
a me
Soon, they tell me.
a me
What will my grave say?
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Will I have a grave?
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Names.
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Just a set of letters.
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Arranged to form something comprehensible.
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What's in my name?
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Does it matter?
me
No.
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In the end, my name won't be remembered.
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My deeds will.
me
My memory is fuzzy.
me
Was I always like this?
me?
So bitter?
me?
So frail?
me?
So envious?
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Did I used to be different?
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Why am I so calm?
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What's it mean to be a soldier?
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What's it like to be immortal?
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What awaits me on the other side?
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I miss them.
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I miss my
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What's in a name?
WoW! Powerful and raw. Left me speechless.
2494633>>2495009 Many thanks aplenty to both of you! I plan to update this collection as much as possible, and I'm glad you liked the poems! I'm kinda a sucker for deeply personal and/or emotionally charged poems.
But, if there is any way I can improve, please let me know!
Many thanks with love,
-Ghost
2495022 To be honest, I don't see anything you can do to improve your poetry, it is real good as it is. I am a lover and writer of poetry. As long as you write/speak it from your heart it is poetry in my opinion. I can't wait for you do a poem on Spike. I am a big fan of Spike, and I want to see if you write about his inner feeilngs about being left out most of the adventures that the Mane Six go on.
2495771Dude, if it comes to me, I'd write an epic poem about Spike, chronicling a day's worth of adventures when the mane six aren't there, anything from ponies he meets to what he dreams about.
Love your profile pic, by the way. OUAT is a fantastic show!
2496140 Well, thank you very much, I truly appreciate that. I am a huge Oncer and a proud Brony! Can't wait for the new episode tonight. Also i am a huge Evil Regal.
I loved the idea behind this one. Very experimental.
I did have to stop a moment once I saw that the letters were disappearing. For a second I thought you were just copy-pasting it and forgot one of the letters. And then 5 seconds later, I'm like: 'Of course it was intentional, you doofus!' and face-palmed.
I wonder if it might have worked more effectively to have various anagrams instead of just slipping out the letters. (not saying that it would be better, I just wonder...)
Still I loved knowing where it was headed and seeing it get there. I think this was my favourite so far. Great work!
2497707Wow, thanks for all the feedback! Okay, here we go.
Sentimentality was the start of all of this, and I loved writing it. Not much to say about it.
Beyond the Leaves: Yeah, it's not my best. It's also my least favourite out of all four so far, and I'm not terribly proud if the large middle section. The end I like, with the whole "hat and father honesty" bit. My intent anyway was to tell all the way through, with an extremely small amount of emotional input from AJ herself, until the end when she goes to bed. I'll probably look it over for the fifth time and change much of it. Maybe. I guess it's more of an experiment to how I could tell instead of show. Backwards writing logic, I know, but all of these poems are experiments in a way...
Say Hello: This was written in haiku form, but not necessarily what is considered "traditional" 5-7-5 form, because not all haiku are even like that. The skipping of that stanza was intentional, as, once again, many haiku I've read actually have those odd and nonsensical breaks. Why? Because they can, I guess? This probably sounds like I'm trying to sound smarter than I am. I'll probably edit it anyway, just because. Not sure though. The "I love you" thing at the end wasn't an implication if shipping, although I'm sure most will see it as such. The idea was that Dash loves AJ for the friend she is, not a lover (though I can truly, honestly see where you're coming from).
And finally, Unnamed: This. Poem. I agree, anagrams may make the poem flow differently, give it a different feel. But nevertheless it's my overall favourite.
Experimentation was essentially my goal with this collection. Be they good or not-so good, they're all attempts at many different things. But I appreciate the in-depth review for each one you gave. Very much so. Why else would I respond with such a long message?
I plan on writing more about AJ, but giving it more of a show instead of a tell vibe to it. To, like the Fluttershy one and the Unnamed one, make it emotionally personal. I also have some ideas for Spike, Rarity,and even Discord.
Okay, once again, thanks for all the feedback and taking the time to be in-depth and to actually read all of them. Thank you. No amount of "I believe this is good, this isn't so good" critique could make me more happy. This is simply because since you took the time and made the effort, I am happy. I probably sound like a broken record, but it really does mean a lot.
Aaaannd I'm running outta things to say. Thanks again.
Love always,
-Ghost
Um, just wondering because I couldn't piece it together but who exactly is this poem about?