I took in the sight. It was beautiful, this world is beautiful. I began to walk through, the field until I noticed a cottage made out of a tree.
"Fluttershys"
" You don't know that."
"One way to find out."
I quickened my pass to the cottage. As I drew closer, I noticed the lack of noise. "Its quite, to quite......"
*sights*
I slowly made my way to the front door, I made sure to stay low so I don't scare Fluttershy. I didn´t need my first encounter with a pony to be sour. I peeked in through the window, I didn´t see a single animal. " What gives there is always animals around, something's up." I ran around the back still no sign of life. " What gives? "
"Go into town maybe, we can find them there."
"I didn't know you cared."
"I don't. It's ether stay here and be bored to death or do some snooping and figure out how to get home."
"Alright let's get going then."
I began to walk down the path way. " I still wonder what happened to the animals they were fine near the forest. I mean Discord is reformed and Twilight is a alicorn, so I don't think anything bad can happen around here."
"It´s the freak´en pony world, they have more bad luck then we do."
"True. What? You admitted it!!! YOU ADMITTED THAT WE ARE IN EQUESTRIA!!!!!"
"Ok maybe we are, like a 0000.0000000000000001 percent chance thou."
"It´s still a chance." I said as I continued down the road.
I continued my journey. For about 10 minutes until I saw Ponyville. I could tell by the outskirts. "I should probably stick to the bushes, just until I figure out what´s going on here." I heard voices a head. I quickly jumped in the shrubs, and began to inch my way closer to the voices.
"I don't know Twilight." A voice said just beyond the leafy wall.
"What, What is that Celestia?"
I needed to know. I moved a few twigs to get a better look. My eyes met to see The royal alicorn sisters,The Elements of Harmony, a few royal guards, and.........
"What the fuck is that thing. I said to my self almost shouting.This creature was horrific. It was a giant white looking lizard, it´s hight much dwarfed Celestia, it had veins pulsing from it´s arms and legs, it´s eye's are a sickening green, and it had a spear like mouth. "This things looks straight out of a nightmare. A painful scream broke me out of my trance. I looked to see it belonged to a filly. What ever this monster is, it had the filly wrapped in it's tail. The monster looked like it was constricting the child with it´s tail.
"I have to do something." I said in a mixture of panic and determination. I grasped the hilt of my sword. I leaped out of the bushes and lunged at the beast.
2510990 I did, sorry it's really short. But I will start updating more often.
You might want to change the 'on hiatus' label
2607561 I will
Have you thought about picking up an editor? There are quite a few grammatical errors that somewhat take away from the experience, but on a whole it's still pretty good. I like how you added an original monster thing, makes it interesting.
If Celestia, the mane six, Luna, and some royal guards are there, why don't they... Oh. *chuckles evilly* I see what you're possibly doing. Am I right?
By the way, were did the sword come from?
2609788 In the first chapter he purchases it.
What do you think I´m doing?
2610981 I don't want to say to much I case I give it away, so how do I word this... Has it gone cupcakes, or has it gone to the factory? Do you even know what I'm saying with this?
2612118 bingo. I got a better way to ask what I'm asking. Is the main character going to be set against the the mane six and their group, who may or may not control the monster?
Oh, god I'm such an idiot. I replied to my own comment, and then got a new notification. I got all excited, just to find myself replying to myself. Am I the only pony to have done that?
2612127 No the main character is with the main six. The monster, is in another group. It had a spoiler in the first chapter, when the monster, said " WE HAVE BEEN GONE FOR 6000 YEARS. BUT YET YOUR STILL WEAK AS EVER."
2613684but then why aren't the main six trying to stop it? Or is that for the next chapter?
2614341 In the first chapter, they tried using the Elements, but the monster grabbed a filly as a hostage.
2615801 Ah. I kinda forgot that part as well. Well, this is slightly embarrassing.
2615822 Don't be, I haven't updated in so long. It's my fault.
2615868 It doesn't feel right for letting you take the credit of me forgetting while you had a busy life. I take credit for it, I have a short term memory.
2615876 I have ADDHD so it's hard to focus. Still my fault. I´ll try to update next week or this week.
2615887 Bitch please so do I. I'm takin the credit, and there ain't nothin you can do about it. And now I gotta eat supper, so ill continue this afterwords.
2615901 Ok, have fun.
2615911i just realized how bucked up this is. We're arguing with each other, not to pass the blame on, but to take the blame for ourselves. We are wonderful people.
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