Chapter 1: A New Friend
It had been almost an entire season now since the hearing. Rainbow Dash was long gone only leaving behind her pet tortoise Tank. Dinky stayed in contact with Rainbow Dash through letters that her mother made sure got to Rainbow Dash. The most important change for Derpy though was the right to raise her filly; she finally had earned it permanently and no pony else could take that from her. Even that wasn’t enough for her though; while Derpy was on relatively good terms with a few ponies in Ponyville, Rainbow Dash was her only true friend and her disappearance made Derpy’s home feel even emptier when Dinky was away at school. The bills were still an issue from time to time but the bits Dinky got from Rainbow Dash for watching Tank was a big help. The only bad thing that resulted from the hearing was that Dinky really began questioning Derpy about who her father was and what happened to him, a touchy subject Derpy had hoped to avoid for as long as possible. One night while trying to find where she had left her Soarin action figure; Dinky stumbled across the destroyed painting in Derpy’s closest. Dinky couldn’t make much out of it except that it was a painting of Derpy. Dinky grabbed the piece of the painting that contained Derpy’s face, and brought it over to her mother who was in the living room getting the mail sorted for next day’s delivery. Dinky trotted over to her unaware mother and dropped the piece of canvas on top of the mail Derpy was sorting and demanded:
“Mommy why is there a painting of you in your closet? Why is it all messed up?”
“W-Well you see m-muffin, I uh, i-it came fr-from… I guess its t-time I was honest wi-with you Dinky.”
“Honest about what mommy?”
“Your fa-father Dinky, he pa-painted that for m-me.”
“Wow really mommy? So daddy was a painter? But why is it smashed to pieces?”
“You s-see muffin, before y-you were born, your d-daddy had a chance to fo-follow his dream, a dr-dream that didn’t have a-any room for us.”
“So is that why daddy isn’t here with us? What was his dream?”
“Yes mu-muffin, and his dream w-was to paint at ca-canterlot castle for Princess Ce-Celestia.”
“So daddy lives at the royal castle now mommy? Why haven’t we visited him?”
“We-Well Dinky, when you are ol-older you will understand, but he h-had to leave me, and i-it just isn’t po-possible for us to be with him.”
“Then why is the painting he gave you ruined? Wouldn't you want to keep it?”
“You s-see muffin, I tr-tried my best to m-move on so I de-destroyed it to get rid o-of the memories, but I co-couldn’t manage to get r-rid of it co-completely. After a-all Pon… I u-uh mean your fa-father is… or was p-part of our f-family.”
“Why would you want to forget him mommy? Don’t you want our family to be togeth…”
“H-Hush now Dinky! I’ll t-tell you more w-when you are a big pony.”
“I am a big pony mommy! I am! I am! I am!”
Dinky was pretty upset that her mother was hiding things from her; especially something as important as her father, and stomped at the ground furiously in protest but to no avail. Derpy refused to say any more on the matter and told Dinky to go take her bath. The fact of the matter was that Dinky already felt made fun of enough at school for who her mother was, and Derpy didn’t want Dinky to know her own father didn’t want her as well. Later that night while Derpy was cleaning the house she stumbled across Dinky’s favorite toy shoved under the couch. Derpy brought it to a now sleeping Dinky and sat it down on the bed next to her. Almost like a reflex Dinky reached out and dragged the toy in close, snuggling it against her chest. Before Derpy left the room she whispered to Dinky:
“Y-You’ll know the truth o-one day, sweet dr-dreams my little mu-muffin.”
As time went on though Derpy really struggled with being alone; for the longest time she had Rainbow Dash, and then Ponet as well, but now both of them are gone which left Derpy to raise Dinky all by herself. Derpy slowly fell into depression from the looming situation that within a matter of months she won’t be able to afford to send Dinky to school. School had became Dinky’s favorite part of her day as she was able to learn and interact with with all the other fillies and colts. Dinky loved her mother very much and couldn't care any less about her Derpiness, but Dinky always enjoyed proving to others she was just as capable as everypony else even though her mother was different. The routine visits from FPS grew farther apart until they were completely satisfied with Dinky’s progress and stopped visiting all together. This was one of the last of Derpy’s interaction with other ponies as most of them were not home when she delivered their mail. One day though Derpy was to deliver a thick envelope to a house that had been empty for the longest time, and the envelope was addressed to a Dr. Whooves while the mail had apparently been forwarded from another address. Derpy was excited with the possibility to make a new friend and went out of her way to visit that house first. When Derpy arrived she noticed there were a bunch of boxes stacked in front of the house which confirmed to her that somepony had just moved in. The house lacked a mailbox so Derpy knocked on the front door to see if somepony was home. Within a few moments Dr. Whooves answered the door and asked:
“Why hello there, what brings you by to my home? I have just moved here to Ponyville.”
Derpy became a bit nervous as she stared at the handsome earth stallion, and after an awkward pause finally said:
“H-Hi my name is Derpy, I’m the ma-mailpony for Ponyville and I de-deliver all the mail.”
“Oh well that must be an interesting job. I’m assuming since you are here you must have some mail for me?
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Love it. I can't wait for you to write more as-well.
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read the prequel please if you have time its linked in the description
2262235 Reading them now. :D.
I like it, but the ending just...I dont know, it had all sorts of steam and it let it out at the end there. The rest is great! dont get me wrong.
I'd have tried for something like:
Derpy knocked on the door, eager to meet a new pony in town. The door clicked open, revealing a well-kept stallion with a spiky brown mane.
"Why, 'ello there, my fair mare, what brings you to my abode today? Are you the welcoming committee?" he asked as he set down a box.
"U-uh, no, I-I'm the ma-mailpony for this town, De-Derpy Hooves." Derpy said, looking both away and at him.
"Well then! I daresay you might have a few items of postage for me? Come in, come in, my dear Derpy!" the fine Doctor stated.
Derpy followed the stallion into his home, a small smile forming on her face at the prospect of having a new friend.
Ahem.
sorry to be that guy, but yeah, thats what i would do. but you arent me now, are you? heh heh. Carry on!
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I really do appreciate your feedback btw. Good thing that's not the story ending just where I finished the chapter. lol I used to write in even more intense detail that you suggested but it really tires me out creativity wise. So I just focus on good story plot as best I can and go back later to spruce things up.
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Yeah I knew its the chapter end. The ending is what keeps readers continuing onward to the next point. By all means, write what you want, just know that it lost my interest at the end for a bit.
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Noted Thanks. Since I have nothing written after it so far I can easily go back and change it which I will.
2262355
also have you a shout out in the story description.
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Oh youuuu!
You didnt have to do that!
Doctor Whooves "The Doctor" or Doctor Whooves "Time Turner" the clock maker and Mayor's assistant?
Personally, I don't care too much for the former because it's been done to death.
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I had planned for clock maker, but I still planned on keeping the doctor's personality in him.
2263977 Liking it so far. I too have a story with Derpy and Time Turner, with Time Turner just being a normal earth pony. But then Pinkie Pie comes to an insane conclusion that he's some sort of time traveling alien because not much is known about him. I might do a followup once I've worked more on my TwiMacVerse.
"It... it's bigger on the inside!"
"You know... you'd be surprised the number of times I've heard somepony say that!"
"Could care less about her derpiness"
YESH, DERPINESS ALL THE WAY!
Also, why is Derpy stuttering so much? I know it's not as big of a deal, but sorry...her stuttering gets a bit annoying.
Good story so far. You won you a mustache.
DER-PY DER-PY DER-PY!!!!