Ok, upon further work, I think there is a little thing about what exactly makes a marysue/gary stu. I will say he is NOT faster than Rainbow Dash, but SPOILER so not saying more.
I didn't intend for the hoof color to be in any relation to that. It was meant to be kind of subtle, and a hint at character development, not a a shot at making him look cool. Ideally, it would be thought of as ugly, to have an off-color appendage. The sonic boom thing is admittedly overdone, but I suppose I can't say why. The whole point is to not say anything as to why of yet, but if I don't, it's all mary sue. Rock and a hard place
I'd appreciate your thoughts if you want to take it to pm, but I'd rather not say more here
Having read most of the story so far [including the parts that havent bee posted yet] I can say that Shadow grows to be quite an amazing character, and that giving up on the story because off a mary sueish appearance straight off isnt the right way to go about this fic. it gets damned enthralling.
also, LAP, I look forward to finishing our co-lab and getting more of my other fics written. can I count on you to edit?
I'm glad I found this among my 13 pages of unread favorites. I'll just keep this open in my Vita's browser, so I don't lose it again. I gotta go to bed, though.
Awesome so far, and holy shit! Shadow is faster than Dash? What is this sorcery?
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Ok, upon further work, I think there is a little thing about what exactly makes a marysue/gary stu. I will say he is NOT faster than Rainbow Dash, but SPOILER so not saying more.
I didn't intend for the hoof color to be in any relation to that. It was meant to be kind of subtle, and a hint at character development, not a a shot at making him look cool. Ideally, it would be thought of as ugly, to have an off-color appendage. The sonic boom thing is admittedly overdone, but I suppose I can't say why. The whole point is to not say anything as to why of yet, but if I don't, it's all mary sue. Rock and a hard place
I'd appreciate your thoughts if you want to take it to pm, but I'd rather not say more here
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Having read most of the story so far [including the parts that havent bee posted yet] I can say that Shadow grows to be quite an amazing character, and that giving up on the story because off a mary sueish appearance straight off isnt the right way to go about this fic. it gets damned enthralling.
also, LAP, I look forward to finishing our co-lab and getting more of my other fics written. can I count on you to edit?
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Yes you most certainly can.
Just finished reading chapter one, and I can say that I really feel for Rainbow Dash. Also ,this Shadow pony is interesting to say the least.
I'm glad I found this among my 13 pages of unread favorites. I'll just keep this open in my Vita's browser, so I don't lose it again. I gotta go to bed, though.
Awesome so far, and holy shit! Shadow is faster than Dash? What is this sorcery?