What would you do for the one you love?
RD to the rescue!
Might I make a suggestion for the next chapter? Have it focused on AJ during the "hours later" that our protagonist was unconscious.
2140501Not a bad idea. Actually, I really like it. Def will give it a try, see how that turns out.
Moar
You have my attention , but shall you keep it? Only the next update will tell, so please sir may I have some moar?
MUCH better this time. I still recommend slowing down a bit, but you've done about 10x better than you did on the previous chapter. Keep up the good work!
RD to the rescue!
Might I make a suggestion for the next chapter? Have it focused on AJ during the "hours later" that our protagonist was unconscious.
2140501
Not a bad idea. Actually, I really like it. Def will give it a try, see how that turns out.
Moar
You have my attention , but shall you keep it? Only the next update will tell, so please sir may I have some moar?
MUCH better this time. I still recommend slowing down a bit, but you've done about 10x better than you did on the previous chapter. Keep up the good work!