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YES. THIS CHAPTER. ALL OF MY YES.
Nice chapter. Looking forwards to more.
I do however think that you should have given Twila's flashback more of an intro/setup than what you did. I saw this because one moment she is talking to AJ and the next it goes straight into the "Flashback" or memory or whatever you want to call it. Wasn't done badly, just think that you could have done it a little differently and/or set it up a bit more beforehand rather than a straight transition with no explanation of whats going to happen.
I'm beginning to think that 'The Tyrant' isn't Celestia
That doesn't sound like a tyrant
Great chapter! All I can say is.. MOAR!
* walks in *
So I haven't read this yet due to my unwillingness to read something unfinished. However... I'm seriously considering starting it anyway.
Also, you spelled hors d'oeuvres wrong in the description....
So much Twila! Thanks for the amazingtasticalnesskewlitty update!
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Yes, but the question then becomes: Why did you like it so much?
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Heh, yes. The first one is kind of focused on Jack and Dash. This one shall be focused on Twila and Rarity. Though I admit I might lean a bit too much on Twila, heh. I try not to play favorites, but there you go.
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I decided to do it the exact same way we did it in Fool's Gold, no real build up or hand off, just a loosely logical place to transition in with it. The feeling here is that Twila is beginning to realize she has always been a bit too dependent, though she is so capable herself. So, that thought was the transition into the flashback which backs up that thought as well as building the characters and universe. Plus, explaining the entire purposes of the Heists themselves.
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Technically speaking, Calli, we're not too far from being finished. We just felt we had enough story done to go ahead and begin releasing chapters. The story will be done much sooner than later. Also, damn, I meant to double check that. In my defense, that was actually GDoc's auto-correct. I was going to check it, because it still seemed wrong, but I forgot. Apparently, it's such a common misspelling, GDocs thinks that's what it should be. Thanks for the catch.
I was always conflicted when it came to shining armor and his human name......bloody bogan
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Mostly because it gave a realistic perspective on how Twila would be feeling about leading the mission. I enjoy seeing characters react to fallout of a plan, and this fic executed this superbly. I also enjoyed this little flashback into Twila's magic exam, and how she saw the questions as easy.
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What, you mean ours? What's so conflicting about it?
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Twila's pretty much all mine, so thanks a lot for all that. I based her experience with the test with several of mine, back in the day. I never really understood how so many people can have issues with general knowledge style tests, there are just some things you know. It's when you start specializing that things get more difficult, least as far as I've experienced.
Hope to keep entertaining you.
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No I'm talking about shining armor, I was always stuck trying to think of a good human name for him that would fit but eh.
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Ah. Well, Merc already did Shields for Twila, which worked well enough. Llewellyn was my choice, though. Heh, since it means 'shining'.
For the love of my damaged sanity!
Continue this now!
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Now? Now?! How dare you make demands of us! We shall release it when we're good and ready!...
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It just so happens we're good and ready to release it now, heh. Oh heck, take two chapters!
The great thing about this is that if it were anyone else, I'd assume they were exaggerating for effect or saying something more like what they thought people expected to hear. From Spike, though, I believe that this is the first thing that came to mind, because that's the kind of respect he has for Rarity. He doesn't objectify her beauty, he admires her on all levels, and he really thinks she's so far above him as to be unobtainable. He's seen angels, and he prays he'll get to go to heaven with them one day.
Perfect score? ... Yeah. Perfect score. This is Twila Shields we're talking about. If she finds herself in a universe where the laws of physics themselves don't sit up and roll over at her command, she'll just have to settle for everything else.
Llewellyn and Cadence are great too, by the way. It's a short scene but it pretty much tells you everything you need to know- he's a knight in shining armor, she's his maiden fair beloved by all. He has no idea why she picked him, and she has no problem with being cute and mysterious about it even though she thinks it's obvious. He does all the work to get Twila motivated, then gives her all the credit and is amazed at how effective she is, and she just smiles and goes along with it because it's easier and more fun than correcting him.
I'll be back.
Forgot to mention: as I suspected, there is more between Mac and Chylene than just the standard friend's brother/sister's friend relationship... though I admit I didn't foresee their courtship already having gone from start to finish by now. I wonder if we'll get to know why that ended... It doesn't seem likely to fall within the purview of our story as conceived, but a man can dream.
Derp, I forgot to favorite this story. No wonder it 'hadn't been updated' in forever
This was a nice chapter.
2143717 What language is that in, I can't place it. Also why on earth did I drag my feet with this story?! I forgot how good of writers you and Merc are.
Hmm... so far, so...fcking awesome!!
Little Twily is always adorkable. Always. As are Cadance and Shining Armor. Great chemistry between the two. And leave it to Dash to tease/encourage Spike about Rarity. For some reason, I could see her proposing a foursome between her, Jack, Spike, and Rarity. But that could just be my penis talking.