"Look, whatever the hell is going on, I just want to find out where I am and stop being attacked! Leave me alone!" Theresa yelled at another one of those damned horses, no.... wait... A UNICORN! Bloody fucking hell, a unicorn? The Hero of Kvatch killed the last one, so how is one here? Did I travel through time and space? It just made a clumsy slash at her, not even coming close to cutting her as she deflected it with ease.Do these things ever fight? I saw better moves off bandits then that! She sighed, and raised her blade, about to slay the stupid unicorn, when the little pink and yellow ball somehow hovered in front of her. She looked at it curiously..
And met oblivion. Eyes full of fury met hers, and she stiffened. "....What are you? Some sort of lesser daedra?" She stared back, meeting the fury of this strangely scary yellow winged horse with the knowledge accumulated from a thousand dead dragons, the emotions of their lives roaring up inside her, filling her with power. She growled in fury, reached out, and snapped the wings off at the base. "Fuck with my head again, and I will give you to the lord of rape as a new playtoy." The little horse was shivering, so she decided that it had enough. She looked at where the armored unicorn was, and now around 80 horses, some with wings, some unicorns and all with armor, had arranged themselves in front of her. Standing in the center was a majestic sight, another winged unicorn but this one was pure white, wearing armor that appeared to be forged from some strange light blue-green metal. In front of it, in a golden aura, was a massive halberd. It was made of the same strange material, and looked extremely sharp. It had a filigree of gold on it, in the shape of a sun, outlining a masterfully carved ruby in the same shape. When she looked at the large, white horse, it had a tattoo on it's butt of the sun. Well, someones got a theme going.
"Screw this, 80 to 1 odds? Not gonna fight like that. Now, if it was more even..." GOL HAH DOV! The Thu'um manifested as a ring of golden light, ringed with white, and hit around 30 of the unicorns, and about 14 of the winged ones. It also struck the big one, but it somehow resisted it. She gave it a curious look, not even dragons could stand up to that! "What are you?" She asked it, and it responded with some sort of odd pulse, which looked like ripples of golden water, pouring out from it. The strange magic struck her, and her jaw dropped as her weapons appeared in a pile behind the strange winged horse.
The telltale signs that her Thu'um had taken effect also disappeared from the unicorns and winged horses that were struck by it. "What the HELL was that!" She roared, furious. NO-ONE ever, ever, EVER touched her weapons. She had worked for days on them, poured her heart, her soul, her very essence of being into them, and being separated from them felt like she had just had her soul snapped in half and stomped on by a mammoth.
"Oh, it is ON now, bitch. You took my weapons? Fine, then you die slower." She pulled back her hood, revealing hair that was a ebony black, skin of dragon scales, and eyes that looked like frozen diamonds, glittering with pure fury. The large white horse reared back, and slammed its front hooves into the ground, and the floor shattered beneath her feet. The Nightingale quickly reached up, grabbed the rim of the sudden hole in the floor, and pulled herself up, launching her lithe body into the ceiling, where she grabbed the one with rainbow hair, and ripped out a wing bone. She grinned, now she had a weapon, and with it, she immediately dropped down, and drove the sharp point of the bone, shattered from the impact of her wings on the ceiling, into the armored unicorns eye, causing it to drop its sword. She let go of the bone, and picked up the sword, swinging it a couple of times experimentally, testing the balance. "Not bad smithing for a bunch of retarded unicorns and mutated freaks." Several of the winged horses looked green, and the floor soon had a light coat of vomit.
The large one did something similar to what the other winged unicorn had, creating a wall of force with its voice. Oddly, it was not using the Thu'um, but something else. Are these things capable of mimicking the Thu'um? It looks like it. She merely said "FUS RO DA", and the wall of force created by the large white winged unicorn was canceled out by the force of the Thu'um. "Whatever the hell you are, you just screwed up by the numbers. Challenging me to a battle of shouts is the very last thing you want to do. YOL TOOR SHUL!" The stream of fire slammed into the large white winged unicorn, and dissipated harmlessly. It launched a massive fireball back at her, and she stopped it, barely. She charged, and slashed the first unicorn in the throat, grabbed that ones sword, and jammed them both into the chest of one of the winged ones, kicking the corpse off the simple blades. A bolt, similar to a firebolt spell, but golden in color, flew at her, and she dodged it with ease, killing another unicorn by gutting it while she rolled. She got up, and cut both wings off one of the winged ones, where it collided with a unicorn. They both collapsed, the unicorn from the impact, and the winged one from the fact that it had a horn sticking out of its chest. "SLEN TIID VO!" The world slowed down, and the Nightingale smiled. She ran over to the pile of weapons behind the large one, when it somehow managed to slam a wing into her throat, crumpling the esophagus. She collapsed, and her vision faded to black...
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2262420 Where the FUCK DID YOU GET THAT TANK?!
SO FUCKING AWESOME!!!!!
Good story but I require....... MOAR!!!!!
She swears, shouts, is bloodthirsty, rips out wings and bones for no good reason, stabs out eyes, mutilates Luna and numerous other ponies (entirely unbelievable, mind you) and is completely annoying and bland. I'm sorry, but are we supposed to be interested in or sympathise with this poor excuse of a character? I don't understand why this has as much upvotes as it does. Faith in fandom: -1
2265220 She believes that Luna used Thu'um on her, which, to a dragonborn, is basically the equivalent to slapping them with a glove. No wings were ripped out, although Flutters and Rainbows were broken, and the bone was because Celestia disarmed her. And as to the mutilation, only Flutters, Rainbow and Luna were mutilated, the rest died. Going for the eyes is a perfectly tactic in combat, and fighting fair is for idiots.
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It also doesn't make her the least bit likable. If that was intentional, then I can say you fully succeeded in making a detestable character. She's also showing Sue tendencies, an unlikable mix of anti and villain Sue, from what I've seen. She might in fact have already crossed the Mary Sue Event Horizon, which is another strike against her. She's also pretty dumb, no scratch that, she's just all around stupid. Wind up in unknown place with unknown creatures? "Durr, mutilate everything that moves!" Add to that that you made her take out the second most powerful pony in canon without any effort, and bam, third strike. Your character is out. Downvoted, good sir or ma'am.
2265481 She thinks that Luna used the Thu'um. What else besides her and dragons does that? Dragons, which she pretty much is, are highly competitive, with Asskicking Equals Authority to them. And she beat Alduin, who had NINE GODS running for their lives. While Luna is a goddess, Theresa beat something that had NINE of them running away. And its sir.
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So she can't tell the difference between a horse and a dragon. This keeps getting better and better. Even if she beat Alduin, she didn't do it alone, but with lots of help. Without Paarthunax's assistance, she never would have learned of the means to slay Alduin, and during the final battle with Alduin, she was aided by the heroes of Sovngarde. Added to that that she didn't absorb Alduin's soul, so it is debatable if Alduin is even truly forever vanquished. Furthermore, as powerful as Alduin is, he is not an Aedra or a Daedra. At most he is a creation of an Aedra (Akatosh in this case), but even that is debatable. His claim of being the first-born of Akatosh may just be that, a boastful claim, or should not be taken in the literal sense. Either way, he is not a god (ancient Nords may have worshipped him as one at some point, but that doesn't make him a god). Considering he got beaten the first time by normal, non-dragonborn mortals, it should be pretty obvious that his power is nowhere near the level of Aedra or Daedra. As for Theresa, Dragonborn or not, she is still mortal and by far not capable of killing or mutilating a goddess.
2265543 The heroes of Sovngarde were, in fact, dragonborn, for they used the Thu'um, and were fairly obviously not greybeards. Alduin was beaten because a ELDER SCROLL was used, before that they were getting their butts kicked. So, basically, she did something that a scroll could not, which is scary when you think about it. And Luna is alive, just badly wounded. Although you have given me a idea. As for horse=dragon in her mind, that is simply ridiculous, the point was the use of Thu'um(or the royal canterlot voice, which is close enough to fool her), which is a challenge to a fight. As for power, over 1000 dragons were mentioned. Think that just might give a bit of a boost, along with insanely powerful artifacts?
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The scroll only sent Alduin forward in time (to the Fourth Era, where you face him), something the Dragonborn couldn't do. Also, as Paarthunax and the Greybeards theorise, you didn't permanently kill Alduin anyway, he's still going to come back to fulfil the prophecy on the Elder Scroll. So Luna is alive, without her eyes, her horn and one of her wings. Yeah, she should be so happy about living the rest of her eyes mutilated with her most important senses cut off by a random maniac who kills first and talks later. [/sarcasm] Either way, the Dragonborn knew or believed only she or dragons can use the Thu'um. Luna is clearly not a dragon, so why did she immediatly assume what Luna used was a Thu'um when she can see Luna's not a dragon? It should have at least made her scratch her head and try to figure out what's going on, instead of immediatly opting for mutilating like a bloodthirsty, uncivilised barbarian. Also, a thousand dragons, really? Aside from the fact that it's debatable if that many dragons even existed in the first place, I think Theresa's Mary Sue level just skyrocketed. I really think you should think this over a bit better, to be honest.
I liked it. I prefer the more "Charismatic" heroes in these situations, but it's not my story. However, Celestia should still have been able to over power the Dragonborn. Even with end game equipment you can get fucked by a lot of monsters, and Celestia and Luna are both goddesses. Also, just to prove a point to Keeper of Jericho, gods and goddesses are immortal. Luna has nothing to worry about because that immortality will heal all wounds! Also, have you ever been about 1 health and drank a bottle of juice in Skyrim? BOOM! instant health. not even going into the healing power of food. Plus the ponies have survived much worse than this, getting off with a bandage on their head. Yes, Celestia should be far more powerful. Yes, I would rather the Dragonborn were a bit more curious as to what in the name of the nine divines is going on. No, none of them are seriously hurt, or at least they shouldn't be for long.
2265667 Next chapter. And Celestia did overpower A Dragonborn.
2265585 One eye lost, horn 3/4 cut off, not severed, and the wings will grow back. Just takes a while, immortal regeneration does have limits. And did I say she was happy with it? The Greybeards and Paarthunax did THEORISE that, but it was only a theory, and as a author, I am allowed to bend canon, otherwise the custom shout would not of done a damn thing. Although you do have a point about the Thu'um thing, going to do something about that.
a female DRAGONBORN that is a new and GOOD one
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While the character's personality could use a bit of work, I like were this is going. Also, I don't see why people claim Celestia to be an immortal and all powerful goddess. On the immortal part, we don't actually know that. Yes, she is doesn't age, that or she just has a VERY long lifespan, it doesn't mean she's invincible, which immortality implies. And when it comes to the all powerful thing, we've seen her both rendered helpless against Discord, and seen her outright get her ass kicked by queen chrysalis. Yes, she can move then sun, but that's her special talent though. In short, the idea that a bad ass dragon slaying warrior can pose a challenge to her, is acceptable. Really, I dislike how in most stories how over powered people make Celestia. Anyways, this story is looking good, will keep watching.
2275281 Heh, yeah. Although, to be honest, sun-butt is the biggest danger to Theresa because of her sun affinity.