please tell me that nosa won't be the current, or ex-genocidal covenant member thats just a dues ex machina waiting to happen

2059401
Oh in later chapters there's gonna be covenant's coming in

2059417 no offense to you but i personally hate when its a covenant invasion
also was nosa a member of the covenant and does this take place during the covenant-human war or after

2059470
I know how you feel about that. I hate it sometimes, but there's gotta be some action in it lol. Though Nosa is not a member of the covenant, but back then he used to be before he met Celestia and Luna, and this plot takes place after the covenant-human war. Even though there are gonna be some covenant still hating on the humans.

2059500 but is he some kind of fanatical forerunner worshipper, and has he killed humans in the past. This is important to me because in the war humans were the victims and nosa would have been a genocidal bastard

2059520
This how I'm putting it. Back then he didn't like the covenant killing off the humans, but he had no choice then to follow orders or else they'll named him as a traitor. He regrets for killing the humans that he faced, but now since he's in Equestria he made a vow to himself to protect these innocent ponies from danger.

They dont live THAT long. they just reproduce faster then normal species inside that armor. As long as they are feeded however. Now theirs scarabs and harvesters with the same reproductive process

2059583
Oh?

I kind of want the humans and the hunters not to kill each other. Would be a interesting thing to see happen. Otherwise perfect story so far keep up the good work.

2059651
Thanks

2059536 a redemption story huh. it has potential but you are walking a tight rope

2059795
I know what you mean. Right now I'm doing it to see how good it is to other people. If it's bad, then I'm going to make it good in later chapters. If it's good, then I'm going to make it better in later chapters.

2059984
mmhhmm

2060167
probably his teammate died,
2059536
it would have been awesome if a spartan or an ODST came with the marines, but still it is awesome

2060884
I was thinking of bringing a spartan in this as well. Probably in the near chapter.

2060907
spartan lV or lll? i dont think that you will bring a spartan ll, MC is the only one left

2060920
Maybe III since they are more experience and such.

2060946
ey if you want; i can give you an advice if you are going to make another halo crossover after this one

2061105
PM me about it.

OH please don't let the hunter kill the humand and the vice versa. If I read it right this story is after the war in halo and I woud like to see what woud be the reaction of the hunter woud be after learns what happend wiht the war.

So, wait a second... how long after the Human-Covenant war has it been?

The story suggests that Nosa was around during the reign of Discord, which is around five hundred years in the past. If the two universes are in sync, then it would be impossible for Nosa to know about the humans unless he made contact with a Forerunner artifact. And if he found out through an artifact, he must also know that the humans are the Reclaimers, and not truly his enemy. (Possibly even the key to his "ascension")

The Prophets were the only ones who knew about the humans before the war began, and it was because the Humans could possibly usurp their power using their privileges as the new holders of the Forerunner Mantle of Responsibility that the war began at all.

I suppose a plausible explanation would be that Nosa found an artifact containing a log of the Didact's on what the Humans did during the Human-Forerunner war, and decided that they would be a threat to the Covenant. Even so, the San 'Shyuum (The Prophets) were staunch allies of the Humans at that time, so he would most likely be conflicted as to whether or not he should shoot the humans, or say hi.

All in all, I'd say the general plot ideas are solid, but there are just a bunch of holes where there need to be perfectly plausible explanations as to why things happen. Dialogue is iffy at times, and some of the words Nosa uses wouldn't really be appropriate for him as an Mgalekgolo. Perhaps he's just gotten used to the ponies' way of life. That could explain his use of the word "I", as well. The Mgalekgolo are a hive mind, so I'd say they'd probably think and say things differently than a normal person would. Keep this in mind, and you'll be able to write Nosa better.

Anyway, this story is an interesting concept and I'd like to see how it plays out. Before long, I think you might need a proofreader/editor to give you advice and clean up any errors.

Have fun writing!

2069942
Like I said to the others who asked about how Nosa became in Equestria. He used be in the covenant with his brother, and that takes place around the covenant-human war before he went into Equestria. So, when his brother, the squad, and him were sent out on a mission. They were suppose to find an artifact, but when they arrived humans were there before them. Know this Nosa doesn't like killing humans, but having no choice to follow orders and defend himself. Anyway I'm not going to say the rest since it would spoil the story, and I already know about the worms inside the armor always saying "we" instead of "i". Though I just went out of character, and made him say "i" like he's just one being instead of bunch of worms.

2070013

Ah, that clears up quite a bit.

2070020

Afterthought: Please don't see the following as me just yelling as why this fic is crap. I am actually enjoying it greatly, and I put this in hopes it would help improve the quality of this sory.

I must inquire if you have a proofreader Darkness. If not, I heavily recommend you go look for one. Heck, get anyone, get me, get someone to do a scan through. I'm not textally attacking you, I'm more pleading you do this for the betterment of the story.

From what I've read so far, this story would be among the actually entertaining halo storys people would refrence to... were it not for it being more ravaged with grammical awkwardness than floodlings in the latter half of Halo: Combat Evolved.

As a matter of fact, please consider following what I recommend you fix for the first two sentences. I like this story, that's why I bothered with this:
It was kind of crazy to find out that the spirits of The Elements of Harmony are inside six little ponies. It did perk my intrest in them, because they showed the very same elements that represents them.
Instead: It was shocking to find out the spirits of The Elements of Harmony were inside the six little ponies. Now observing more closely, I noticed that their cutie marks were very similar to the symbols of each element, minus the purple one.
(Changed crazy to shocking to try and give a more [Older, professional?]aged feel to Nosa, unless that's not what you want. Also, just looking at someone for no more than a minute doesn't really give any kind of insight to how one acts, so that's why I offered you change it to Nosa observing their cutie marks, as that connection is much more sightable. Oh, and Nosa shouldn't know about the sixth element, magic, if he was suspended in time after the first rise of Discord.)