why is your OC such a wimp PF?

I like it mostly...... But Pen Knife is more a Luna supporter than Celestia, ponies aren't men, they're stallions. And I don't think he would have abandoned post that quickly but other than that I say it was good. I'm not expecting you to get Pen Knife perfect since you aren't me and don't have every aspect of Pen Knife's personality sitting in your head but I just figured I'd point it out.

2290824 I'll try to fix that, and, no offense, but I can use the term men if I damn well please. But I'll try to fix his personality up. Also, the reason I made him leave his post is because 1.) He had permission from Celestia, 2.) Celestia's kinda a bitch, and Luna died a few thousand years ago... (That's gonna be explained a bit later in the story)

2290531 Because fuck you.

2291345 Geeze, wasn't trying to be rude with the whole men vs stallions thing. Sorry.
Still don't see how Celestia can really be termed a bitch. We barely see enough of her to really make that kind of assumption and what we do see of her is loving and kind. But it is your story and if that's how you want to spin her then go right ahead. Not complaining, just commenting.

Wow. Drifting Facade was right. Shadow Clock is a bit of a bitch.

2291407 There's an Alternate universe tag, and Luna's dead. If you've paid attention to any of the indicators I've put in the text, you would know this is really far set from the canon universe.

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Didn't notice the alternate universe tag and didn't question it when you said Luna was dead. Like I said, not complaining, just commenting on something that seemed strange to me.

Sorry if I upset you.

2295447 Just a little upset.

2333405 If you notice a distinct lack of emotion from your character, it's because I haven't been able to get her a lot of dialogue so far.

God, I could read that bar scene over and over and be entertained. You got my character's personality down pat, and I love the bitch she is.

I'm almost sad. Almost.

2487740 Why are you almost sad?

2487907 Didn't I say you had full reign to kill her when the time comes? I quite remember.

Meh, Either way, Live or Die, she's gonna rock all them ponies.

2488268 Almost all of them are going to die...

2488548 Oh......
well then, Carry on.

<Backs off awkwardly.>

2492243 I love you.

2493127 I know....As does Smitty, and Trebek. Possibly Chives.