After losing contact with Everfree 1, MagiTech industries sends in a search party to investigate...
I CAN'T WAIT! (I can if its to much on you though) I NEED MOAR NOW!! (Like I said, take your time) But my nipples are pretty hard about this story.
IT HAS BEGUN.
I wonder how you'll introduce Pen Knife.....
2034120 In the FUTURE!
2118081 Check my second to latest blog post.
This is pretty good, nice intro to a few of the characters, and you have a good level of intrigue in what is happening. You also set a good pace for the story, and have a good sense of mystery.
I CAN'T WAIT! (I can if its to much on you though) I NEED MOAR NOW!! (Like I said, take your time) But my nipples are pretty hard about this story.
IT HAS BEGUN.
I wonder how you'll introduce Pen Knife.....
2034120 In the FUTURE!
2118081 Check my second to latest blog post.
This is pretty good, nice intro to a few of the characters, and you have a good level of intrigue in what is happening. You also set a good pace for the story, and have a good sense of mystery.