A Death Knight arrives in Equestria thanks to a malfunctioning Death Gate. All seems well at first... but soon a nightmare takes hold as the scourge rise from the darkness. A prophecy foretold over ten thousand years ago now aims to fulfill itself.
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hmmm its kind of his own fault but also not. The CMC scene was hilarious. Applejack overreacted but her friend was incased in ice which is usually a very bad thing. His own fault because he instigated the whole thing by underestimating Twilight. Equally Applejacks, Twilights, and Dalan's fault , although maybe a bit more on Applejacks side.
anyway im enjoying this story so nice job.
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Yeah, all around just bad communication
Too nice
OK, I have to ask, why does almost no writers on this site give consequences to massively violent actions?
Seriously, I'm beginning to think there is something wrong with us as a community. AppleJack kick him so hard that it's basically attempted murder, including breaking his arm, and yet, nothing happens. Of course, if this follows this site's formula, sometime soon AJ will approach the guy with a "Gee, Im ah sorry fur bucking ya, ken ya ever furgive me?" and he will hold a grudge. But absolutely nothing else will happen.
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Agreed, for attempted murder, at the very least, he should have knocked out her teeth.
The Monk
“There are many ways to create a monster, and the one the girl knows best is rather basic: you tell someone they're a monster over and over again, then wait to see how long it takes before they agree with you.” -Estee
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Well considering the chapter ended shortly after the incident, we can't just assume everyone is going to be forgiven for this?
I'm well aware how many authors will shock value in some kind of "Suspenseful" or ooc action and cover it up with a wave of the hand and forgiveness. All i ask is to please withhold your judgment on that until after the chapters have been released
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I realize my comment may have come off a bit commanding. I just want to put fears to rest that I know problems like this exist in the community.
I'm guilty of it myself in my older fics, been writing and reading here since 2012 after all. And i don't want to repeat my same mistakes.
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I didn't think so.
The Monk
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Okay, i just didn't want to sound defensive or anything. Every bit of criticism i get i take into account when writing.
I was originally going to keep the "resolution" to this problem in this chapter but it was already getting pretty long for me (6-7k word chapters are new for me, I usually kept them much shorter) and held off so I could make it it's own chapter entirely.
Can't wait for next chapter keep up the good work!