Relations begin to break down between Equestria and the griffon tribes. As war approaches, new foes and alliances emerge. The mane six find themselves in a race against time to uncover dark plans and stop the griffon chief from ending their world.
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I really like your additions!
Originally, I'd always thought to kind of keep the Griffons side of things down to just Gilda, and the rest is just ambiguous beyond there. At the same time, this does indeed strengthen the story quite a bit.
And it's great how you trimmed the chapters down like you did! I think it all works out very nicely. The chapters are still lengthy, but I guess it's better than 20k per chapter! XD So, it really all works out so well! Good stuff!
Call me officially caught up with this epic story... and very tired.
I guess first thing to say is that I agree that it was so much more nice that the chapters weren't 20k like before. But anyway, this story really has me captivated. It doesn't have too much clop but just enough fluff and such. The scene with Rainbow Dash getting very hurt and poor Flutters... that almost brought tears... but you should translate that as doing a really good job with the writing if you're making me feel here. So... yeah, awesomesauce!
3270040 Thanks. I wondered if chapter 7 would simply be skipped by you. Its good to know that there was impact from the griffin fight scene with Dash. I'm nearly done with chapter 12 (and 13...). I'm just stuck on the next griffin scene a little.
3271789 I would be lying if I said I didn't kind of skim through ch7 at a fast pace, no offense meant at all. Though, I did not just completely skip over it. If you do want anything looked over, I seem to be free during the upcoming week plus the rest of this one.
Whenever I think this has taken too long to update, I always read chapters 10 and 11. They are by FAR my favorite chapters so far, with 5 and 14 coming very close. I can only ask for an update, and hope this story Isn't over yet.
~Wywint
I actually really love how you’ve written Celestia and Luna here cause while I don’t often enjoy reading some of the more overwhelming usage of ye olde Equestrian for Luna, it continues to not feel jarring or odd and Luna’s kind of adorable here. And Celestia here has actually nice depth where I didn’t have to have a scene with her and Discord, the explanation of how she felt and how you wrote that resonated rather well and it was a nice reminder that she still has a ton of feelings below the surface. And now I’m worried about Warbeak cause while I thought he was long dead now it seems like he’s banished and that kind of changes things from Gildas dad getting unlimited power to unknown ancient evil threat that the alicorns barely dealt with which is a deal of magnitude worse than Gildas dad. Interesting.