Subject 42: A test subject that escpaped from her captors into the Frozen Wasteland. Once free she quickly realizes that she may be the only one to stop those that wish to bring chaos to the peaceful lands.
The writing for this is very much similar to the original fallout equestria, I look forward to this, however could you describe 42 a bit more? I like to know what colour mane and eyes she has, but other than that, keep up the good work!
1830082 Yes, I do plan to descibe her soon. I'm just trying to think of a proper way to describe her without placing it randomly in the story. I should have a part added in Chapter 1. Oh, and thanks! I was really hoping that it was close to the original writing style.
1838653 You read my mind... Currently writing the mirror scene now. And it takes place 50 years before Fallout Equestria. (The whole story is viewed through a memory orb) That was done because I have a ending already in mind... And as far as I can tell, there won't be any psuedo alicorns that I know of. But my brain does work in mysterious ways... I might come up with a way to include them. Oh, and chapter 1 is scheduled for release today.
1830672 maybe 42 looks in 41s mirror in his house, also I have 2 questions. Does this take place before or after Fo E? And is there pseudo alicorns? BTW merry christmas!
Oh boy, an intro AND a prologue?
1828791 Eeyup! I'm trying to stay loyal to the orginal.
1828810 Well, alright then...
The writing for this is very much similar to the original fallout equestria, I look forward to this, however could you describe 42 a bit more? I like to know what colour mane and eyes she has, but other than that, keep up the good work!
1830082 Yes, I do plan to descibe her soon. I'm just trying to think of a proper way to describe her without placing it randomly in the story. I should have a part added in Chapter 1. Oh, and thanks! I was really hoping that it was close to the original writing style.
1838653 You read my mind... Currently writing the mirror scene now. And it takes place 50 years before Fallout Equestria. (The whole story is viewed through a memory orb) That was done because I have a ending already in mind... And as far as I can tell, there won't be any psuedo alicorns that I know of. But my brain does work in mysterious ways... I might come up with a way to include them. Oh, and chapter 1 is scheduled for release today.
1830672 maybe 42 looks in 41s mirror in his house, also I have 2 questions.
Does this take place before or after Fo E?
And is there pseudo alicorns?
BTW merry christmas!
You should work on your use of commas.
>like the doctors voice
Needs a possessive apostrophe
>since out other subjects still haven’t
Did you mean "our"?
>You still tell have some free will
wat
>a loud burst of static overtook the silence
Static what?
>Try and stand up
"and" should be "to"
>I could see a faint outline of where it’s supposed to be
"it's" is a tense change
>You’re aiming and reaction times
This should say "Your"
>Subject 41 fired a shot clear through the guards head
"guards" should have a possessive apostrophe
>get down there and eliminate the subjects now!
If he thinks that one is dead, why did he say subjects?
>the earth ponies battle harnesses
Needs a possessive apostrophe
>I saw a awe inspiring sight
"a" should be "an"
>The cold wasn’t even effecting me anymore
"effecting" should be "affecting"
>filled with god knows what
This is not strictly necessary, but I think that "god" should be "Celestia"
1828791
What wrong with that?