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Well I looked at the characters and... Oh god what?

Holy shit man, I've NEVER in the past 2 or so years EVER seen that shipping combo in any way shape or form.

In other words, you have my attention...

That chapter name is brilliant.

First SpikexZecora, now MacxGilda? Where are these unlikely shippings coming from and why didn't they happen sooner?

real meaning of OC right here

take out that "Clop" and make it it longer and you can have a real story

This looks good. Mac and Gilda...hmm, will Spike be shipped with anypony? Like Trixie or Lyra? Both would be good.

You had a reasonably well-executed scene-setting and character introduction ... and then you wasted it on a dozen lines of half-hearted, no-effort clop. Boo, I say. Boo.

Okay then...

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Good.

Despite the votes I support this ship!

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There we go.

no idea why... but favd

Holy balls Mac and Gilda thats a new one
This looks good ima read it now

I'm faving this :3

it's good. keep it up! just one suggestion though... might you make the chapters a bit longer?

Ehh if you can redoubt and put more effort this would be awesome. Ill like it cause its unique but please do better and make moar!

Haha wow that was some short sex

why did you make mac sleep with that bitch??

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This was like sex with a virgin: good beginning, but falls a bit flat when it, uh, comes down to it. Still, there's potential here. Keep at it.