Very nice.

This, is a really freaking awesome idea. I wish I would have thought of it myself.

It's a promising concept, and you have the basics of writing down, but you really need a pre-reader. There are a lot of little grammar/spelling errors and some of the phrasing is repetitive. It could benefit from a second pair of eyes.

Also, you really should space out the paragraphs. I consider it a failing of FiMFiction that this isn't done automatically. RIght now the story looks too wall-of-text-ish.

...... dafuq did I just read? Whatever it was, it was good, thumbs up from me

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What he said!

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And him...

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And... yeah....

1565761 It's the best cover they've done besides "Where did you Sleep Last Night"

Well that escalated quickly.

I like where this is going, a lot.

I would love this as a Videogame

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I listened to that while I made the next chapter.

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I went back and re-spaced everything. Should be much easier to read.

1568623 Nirvana is a great catalyst to writing.

this is good keep righting and i will keep cloping