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wow. this is a really good fic. more please!
Well I'll answers your questions here
(first sorry I didn't commented first, but I was busting my way through my read later list and writing my new chapter)
What I like about the story?
First : VINYL SCRATCH and OCTAVIA without the sad tag (normally I don't require anything more (excepted romance tag))
Second : Inspired by HELLSING (one of the most badass manga in the world)
Third : Your mix between Equestria and the Hellsing universe is incredibly well done. A solid mix of violence, humor and the friendship that makes it all complete
What scenes pleased me?
The Bella/Edward thing (couldn't stop laughing )
The Sniping Moment.
Things to change?
Some paragraphs are too long. It's a bit annoying to read. But that can be easily fixed with some editing
And...that's it
anyway keep on doing what you're doing. It's really promising
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Heard of it? Buddy, I've got the Barnes and Noble H.P. Lovecraft Complete and Unabridged Compendium of Works on my writing shelf less than a meter from my grey matter right now. I've got a copy of GURPS Cthulhupunk on the shelf below that, and a massive book of Salvador Dali's paintings on the shelf under that one.
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Thanks for the critique! I'm uploading the next chapter now, and I split down some of the paragraphs. I also kept my eyes peeled for that transcription bug, so hopefully the paragraphs won't meld together if I end them with italics like they did before. It's great to know you're enjoying the story!
finals in a nutshell
Poor Vinyl has to suffer but this is getting really good.
Nod to the Age of Metal and the great Ormagodden, I approve.