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Go with your gut. Honestly the candy making escapade sounds like a palette cleanser. Something after a dark dark chapter. As for the Chaos infestation in the mining town....-shrugs- And I will have you know I am partial to red-shirts! The Imperial Guard dies standing!
Hmm...I'd like to see A.
I would recommend saving B as an interlude, or a short relief chapter if the story gets too dark. Otherwise, both A and C work, though after how calmly this part ended, A might start a little too slowly. Personally, I think C sounds the most interesting, and after its climax, if the story needs some time to cool down, the start of A could provide it. On a side note, this story is much better without the abridged references (and it was really good from the start). Now that it is its own thing, it has tons of potential. Anyways, good luck with the rest.
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Thanks for the feedback! I decided to go with path A, since it allows me to focus on both the main characters and the humble operatives of the Organization. I hope you like how the story has unfolded so far!
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Your comment was very helpful! In fact, your concern that A might start too slowly was the reason that I started off the next chapter from a different point of view and tried to create a short story within the larger narrative. Originally, I was planning to have Bon Bon explain the vampire problem to Octavia and Vinyl, but thanks to your prodding I realized how boring that would be! Far better for us to see the horror firsthand, to see the tranquil night shattered by a monster, and saved only by the timely intervention of a nameless operative. That was the kind of storytelling I planned to use for C, and I thank you for spurring me to put it to work on option A. I hope you continue to enjoy the story!