Bon-Bon spent the rest of her day with Lyra, her new marefriend. Lyra had written out the notes for her new song, and labeled it, Bon-Bon's song. After a day at the park, Bon-Bon was walking Lyra home when a thought occurred to her.
"Hey Lyra, what will your parents think of us?" she asked as she kissed the unicorn on the cheek.
Lyra stopped so suddenly that Bon-Bon had almost walked away from her.
"They wouldn't think anything, because we have to keep this a secret. My parents have always been against fillyfoolers, and if they knew I was one, They'd probably ground me for life and never let me leave the house." she said with worry.
Bon-Bon just frowned.
"Lyra, you do realize, your old enough to move out right?" she asked.
Lyra looked at her, clearly thinking that Bon-Bon had just asked her to move out.
"I know, but I love my parents very much, and I don't know if they would be able to handle me being gone." she replied.
They continued walking as they talked.
"Well if you did move out, you could come live with me, I have my own place."
"I don't know Bon-Bon, I could try, but then I'd have to tell them about us, I know they would ask where I would live, and they would wonder why, if I told them, I was going to live with you." Lyra said as they reached her house.
"Ok, but if you change your mind, I'll be waiting for you." she said as she kissed her goodnight. When Bon-Bon reached her house, she walked in, and started making things ready for Lyra, if she decided to move out that is.
Lyra walked into her room and lied down on her bed. Bon-Bon had asked her to move in with her. She wanted to so badly, but she didn't want to have her parents hate her. She lied there thinking about it as she fell asleep. The last thought that went through her mind was that she loved Bon-Bon.
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Lyra woke up the next morning feeling just as happy as she did the day before. She got out of bed and levitated her brush through her mane making it presentable. Today was hers and Bon-Bon's first real date, and Bon-Bon was taking her to a fancy restaurant. She rushed out of the house before her parents could ask her where she was going. She rushed down the street until she found Bon-Bon's house, and there waiting for her with a bouquet of flowers.
"Hey Bon-Bon!" she said happily as they quickly kissed. Bon-Bon handed her the flowers and they walked together, hoof in hoof to the restaurant. When they got there they sat down at a table and waited for the waiter.
"So what is it you love about me?" Lyra asked curiously.
Bon-Bon didn't even have to think as she said, "I love your musical talent, and your mane is absolutely beautiful, plus the way you play your lyre in the park makes me really happy, other than that, I don't really know that much about you." she said smiling as the waiter trotted up to them.
"Hello and welcome, Is there anything you would like tonight?" he asked.
"Um, yes. I'd like a salad and an ice tea." Bon-Bon said.
"And for you mam?" he asked Lyra.
"I'll have what she's having." she replied.
"So two salads and two ice teas, we'll have your food in a little bit." he said as he handed the order to the chef.
Lyra stared at Bon-Bon for w little while before she asked, "So what is it that you love about me?" Bon-Bon asked.
Lyra thought about all the things that she liked and loved about the cream colored mare.
"You have good taste in music, and a good taste in restaurants, that's for sure. But I think I would need to get to know you more." she explained.
Bon-Bon laughed as the waiter brought them their food. While they ate, they hadn't realized that Lyra's parents had been watching ever since their daughter had left the house in a rush. They had followed her to Bon-Bon's and to the restaurant. They had seen enough. They turned around and trotted back home to wait for their daughter to return from her date.
Finally, they had finished eating. Bon-Bon left the bits on the table as they left. When they had reached Lyra's house, Bon-Bon kissed her goodbye and wished her a goodnight, then she left. Lyra trotted into the house and closed the door to find her mother and father sitting in the living room, with blank expressions on their faces.
"Hi mom, hi dad. What's wrong?" she asked. She was starting to get nervous.
"Why don't you tell us. And I think you could start by telling us why you kissed that mare, and why you went on a date with her." her father asked. She could hear the disgust in his voice.
"I-I uh...I..." It was too late, they knew, she couldn't hide it. "I'm a fillyfooler, that's why. And I love Bon-Bon." she replied.
Her father recoiled as though he'd been hit. And when she looked over at her mother, she noticed, she had not moved at all.
"I forbid you to see her, I do not want my daughter dating another mare. I'll not allow it in my house!" he yelled.
Lyra just stared at him, tears running down her face.
"I-I hate you!" she yelled. She ran to her room and sobbed. She didn't really hate her father, but it wasn't fair. She loved Bon-Bon, she wanted to be with her no matter what. then she remembered what Bon-Bon had said. If you want to move out, you can come live with me. I have my own place.
Lyra sat up, decided. She packed up all her stuff, including her lyre and all her music sheets, opened up the window and jumped out. She surrounded herself with magic and levitated herself down to the ground. As soon as her hooves touched, she released the magic, and ran. She ran with all her might toward where her Bon-Bon lived. When she got there, she knocked on the door as hard as she could and waited. She saw a light turn on and then she heard the door unlock. The door swung open revealing a tired Bon-Bon.
As soon as Bon-Bon saw that it was Lyra, her annoyance dissipated. She looked down and saw a suitcase and two boxes. She smiled and beckoned for her to come in. She helped her move her stuff into the spare room and they both sat together. Bon-Bon sat there and comforted her marefriend as she told her what had happened. Bon-Bon became angry when she got to the part about her father forbidding Lyra to see her. She hugged her close as she cried. Eventually, they both fell asleep. Lyra felt safer in Bon-Bon's hooves. Things couldn't get worse.
A/N: Well this fic seems like it might be a fun one. In case anypony didn't notice, I used the four dreaded words. "Things couldn't get worse". we all know what happens when somepony uses those words. I'll be updating another chapter soon!
Not bad. This seems a little forced/rushed, but most other LyraxBonbon fics I've read have had Lyra as the flirtatious fillyfooler and Bon-Bon as the oblivious (and/or homophobic) one, so that makes it more interesting.
Also, I really love the cover pic. It reminds me of the There She Is!! flash series with Doki and Nabi. ^_^
But as to what i really love about you is your personality." she explained This is a great fic however it feels as if your going a million miles an hour they just met and all of a sudden they know each others personalty?
Short/ no development = clop one-night stand
long/ lengthy (multiple chapter development) = passionate long-lasting love-story and relationship
It seems your trying to write a story about two mares falling in love with no sex, clop or other adult content. But you are using the development speed of the average meet'n'buck clop. Please take more time to build suspense and develop the characters.
that being said i like fav watch mustache and I love the story.
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1428466 1428479 Fic has been changed a bit. I hcanged the wording in ch 2. It'll give me more time to get them together and more into eachothers personalities. enjoy! *BroHoof!*
Wow. Your writing has really come along since I first saw you. The plot is as good as ever, but with this one, your writing is more thorough, which is awesome. It is also great to see you get good reviews for a story. You deserve them.
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Sort feel like , but hay, what do I know?
ok...way way too fast.
Their using the word love alot without really knowing each other. That just seems really odd.
ouch. . . that was. . . ludicrous speed.
I gotta say, slow down. It's nice that they're moving in together, but there needs to be a little development in it.
At the beginning, I assume it's the same day that ch 1 left off on, which begs a question. In about, I don't know 30-40 hours of knowing her, wouldn't Lyra think it's a little odd that this pony she just met, is offering her own home for Lyra to stay in?
The conflict between Lyra and her parents is interesting, hopefully it doesn't become something thrown into the background.
One last bit before I jump into the next chapter. "Things couldn't get worse." This is a little unneeded unless one of the two mares had thought this as they fell asleep.
Yeah I can't read this anymore. Things are just moving way too fast. I was hoping it was just chapter 1 to get it established that they were a couple before hilarity ensued but at this rate they are going to get found out in ch.3, married in ch.4. This feels wayyyy too much like a shipping fic than a love story.