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Can you say Ork color theory?
This story needs more daka.
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This.
Sunrekka betta rekka da sun by da end o' dis, or we WAAGH!
While good I belive that the first contact with the ponies will happen a bit too fast for my liking, if you keep up the pace.
Also, you should add the Warhammer tag in my opinion.
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Just remember that there are levels to contact, and levels to integration. The MC may meet a pony soonish but he won't be chatting all civil like with them until all the way at the end of arc one.
In fact contact itself is going to be very brief (think a chapter at most) until the next arc starts.
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Okay, as long as he doesn't chop Twilight's head right off, for being to annoying with her questions, at the beginning, I am fine.
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I mean I published all chapters at like 1 am this morning XD
THE BOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOYZ!!!
If you also remember this song, you have my utmost respect across the internet.
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Fixed. Had to include the zogg.
More warhammer, yey.
Good story
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I am going to teach you a very basic writing concept that you have likely never heard of.
Narrative load is a concept that varies in weight based on the complication of said concept, so for example.
"Guy becomes ork, defends ponies."
We have a vast existing meta-knowledge of the trope and its externalities, so I only have to spend a single paragraph on it. We are human so I also don't need to explain what a human is to you, unlike an ork which would require extra explanation. Guy is dead, god likes him, puts him in charge of defending ponies, done. Since you know the concept, I don't have to explain it as that's not the point of the story. The point of the story is mainly comedy, but with some adventurous and world-building elements thrown in. Now lets compare that to...
"Ttzeentch, (A god that would require extensive explanation) mind raping an ork to help ponies (something so far outside of his character that it would require again, extensive explanation and exploration in order to fully rationalize.)"
How would adding tons of extra narrative load, and spending multiple chapters explaining and ruminating on how and why Tzeentch has mind raped an ork help that goal of making jokes, and adventuring? Simple, it wouldn't, your suggestion would not only not help the story, but it would slow it down, detract from its main themes, and require that the entire thing be rewritten to accommodate it.
The story you have imagined is not only worse because you've mindlessly jammed a cognitively dense narrative concept into a story that doesn't need it but you don't have the experience or understanding to even grapple with why that's a bad idea on your part.
So that begs the question, why do you think it's necessary to create a wholly unique origin point if you want nothing else to change? Simple, you want to feel smart, and feel as though you are reading something unique. You are obsessed with the aesthetic of uniqueness but don't have the understanding necessary to grapple with how that fits into reading fanfiction containing magical horses.
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I am sorry, this appears to be more of clash of likings then straight criticism after all. While what I've said and my opinion remains unchanged, I have not realised the story was supposed to be mainly comedic in nature as I have not fully read the story. I had expected the story to be more serious, as many stories with the backstory attempt to (and often fail to) be. In such a case I believe my point would have been more relevant then is the case now. And for your "you want to feal smart" argument, yes, yes I do. Just as much as you, only without big smart sounding words, everybody wants to feal smart. And that's not mentioning the other arguments with even more questionable bases. I of course could try and disect every aspect of your reply and come up with smart sounding reply that tries to destroy your points, that would be just me being an angry bitch and would deserve me the go touch grass reply as it would be accurate in that situation.
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If I had a nickle for every time someone suggested something without even reading the story, I'd have enough nickles to retire to a cozy beach house in the Bahamas.
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Go touch grass, normie.
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Bruh uses the word normie unironically and thinks I'm the one that should touch grass.
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Hes only thinking of 40k races. I had to add a limit somewhere or else there would have been too many to consider.
That would be a good one though.
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Hey man. That's not the point of telling stories. If you don't like reincarnation stories then you don't have to read em. Others like em.
Storytelling is an art and we as humans have made so many stories that creating something truly unique is impossible. If it's a good theme then it'll be used again and again. No one will use a theme that sucks unless they are trying to prove a point or have a niche outlook.
I somehow find it funny that Mr very sophisticated and very good writer(Jest) is writing in such an Orkish manner.