Finding herself in the world of Goblin Slayer, Sunset finds herself in a ruin tower where a fallen Overlord once ruled with an iron fist. And finds the minion amulet that allows her to summon female minions to do her bidding. Harem story.
This happened and then this happened and then this happened and then- My brother in Christ you are not writing a summary. Show us don't just tell, this isn't writing this is a child recollecting a movie they were only half paying attention to. At least put the barest of efforts into it. Ai cant do everything for you.
Interesting concept. I'm assuming this is more human with some anthro aspects like sunset still able to use equestrian magic, then again sunset has yet to be described its Conjecture at this point how anthro this story is though it dose have the human tag if I'm not mistaken. Looking forward to more.
11652745 That clears up a lot. Also with Sunset ask her new Minions what they can do there roles are to see how to proceed is smart. The explanation in the notes is also smart gives the explanation without unneeded fillers and over explanation in the chapter Excellent usage of the author's notes wish I thought of that for my stories or at least some of them.
You need to show more than tell. The concept is interesting, but as Jest's comment said, "Then this happened, and then that happened," is not a good way to go about it.
Try to seek out an editor or possibly use free programs like Grammarly on Google Doc. Maybe even look up Youtube videos on the process of showing and not telling as much.
Interesting story, harsh chapter with fascinating lore.
Questuon: What is the difference between Goblins and Humanity? Answer: One race got apparently curse by at least one god.
Hm... The goblins if raised right from day 1 could build a impressive civilization. Perhaps they pay females for offspring in exchange for monetary and military services?
O hell... Antro story
Sunset riddle cheater, but a clever work around.
Sunset has female Minions, she could use it to rule over all Goblins and create a hole Kingdom around that fact alone! I start with wildlife hunters, foraging of berrys and other things and expand eventually into farmers and warriors first chance we own a residential Goblin nest by the prospect of breedingand leadership through a powerful ubermage. Claiming the ruines, expand them after making repairs and claim the territory around it. A perfect foundation to start her own queendome!
This happened and then this happened and then this happened and then- My brother in Christ you are not writing a summary. Show us don't just tell, this isn't writing this is a child recollecting a movie they were only half paying attention to. At least put the barest of efforts into it. Ai cant do everything for you.
It feels like it was partially written by an AI.
Why and how is this anthro?
Interesting concept. I'm assuming this is more human with some anthro aspects like sunset still able to use equestrian magic, then again sunset has yet to be described its Conjecture at this point how anthro this story is though it dose have the human tag if I'm not mistaken. Looking forward to more.
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Sunset is a beast woman a unicorn girl
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It’s a crossover with Goblin Slayer
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That clears up a lot. Also with Sunset ask her new Minions what they can do there roles are to see how to proceed is smart. The explanation in the notes is also smart gives the explanation without unneeded fillers and over explanation in the chapter Excellent usage of the author's notes wish I thought of that for my stories or at least some of them.
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I’ll describe Sunset when she meets some adventurers
You need to show more than tell. The concept is interesting, but as Jest's comment said, "Then this happened, and then that happened," is not a good way to go about it.
Try to seek out an editor or possibly use free programs like Grammarly on Google Doc. Maybe even look up Youtube videos on the process of showing and not telling as much.
Interesting story, harsh chapter with fascinating lore.
Questuon:
What is the difference between Goblins and Humanity?
Answer:
One race got apparently curse by at least one god.
Hm... The goblins if raised right from day 1 could build a impressive civilization. Perhaps they pay females for offspring in exchange for monetary and military services?
O hell... Antro story
Sunset riddle cheater, but a clever work around.
Sunset has female Minions, she could use it to rule over all Goblins and create a hole Kingdom around that fact alone!
I start with wildlife hunters, foraging of berrys and other things and expand eventually into farmers and warriors first chance we own a residential Goblin nest by the prospect of breedingand leadership through a powerful ubermage.
Claiming the ruines, expand them after making repairs and claim the territory around it.
A perfect foundation to start her own queendome!