Hmm curious to see where it goes but why season 1?

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Not everyone likes the later seasons and the changes they made that are now canon. Twilight became an alicorn, Celestia & Luna retired, Big Mac is married, Spike has wings, the Crusaders have their cutie marks…etc.
On the one hand, we have more knowledge about the story. But on the other hand, ideas that we had before the new seasons came out have now been debunked. For instance, so many people thought Celestia’s corrupted half would be called something like “Nightmares Star” or “Corona Sun,” but now it is set to “Daybreaker.” Spike was considered to be some kind of spellcasting dragon, which is why he didn’t have wings. But now we know that he just hadn’t hit dragon puberty yet. And there were all kinds of theories about when and how the Crusaders would get their marks, and then they finally did.

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I do not specifically object to... well, to most of the later seasons, but Season 1 had a purity and a promise that honestly it would be difficult for anything to live up to.

I should probably note that characters from later seasons are not excluded. I can hardly do a FlutterMac without Discord or Marble in it, now can I? The version of Starlight in this is not quite so much a sociopath tho, so Sugar Belle is happily living a life where she has never been and never will be a cult member. She and Mac will not be entering each others lives.

This is not the first time Fluttershy’s revealed to be a closet pervert but I never get tired of that trope. Also props for making her watch BM pee instead of masturbate

I’m curious to see where this is going, can’t wait for the next chapter.

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Pee is an important part of the sex lives of many animals, including horses! It's science!

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Season 1 had a purity and a promise that honestly it would be difficult for anything to live up to.

I would disagree there but to each their own

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In twenty years, Bronies are gonna be like "Grandma Hairball, why you always writing Gen 4 all the time? What's wrong with Gen 9?"

I need to take that Mark Twain quote and smack it on my new story.

I really like this introduction. I like the way you give Fluttershy-sluttershy a voice through the narrative and you make her intentions very clear. I really like the personality she has and the way that you keep the "feel" to her intact; she wants to indulge, but never in a malicious or manipulative way. And she's still got zero social skills rather than being some seductive enchantress.
You use your descriptors really well. You've got a great grasp of language and how to balance your wordplay so that you're sexy without being vulgar. Your writing is earthy and pleasant, with a very lovely pace and rhythm to it.

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Fuck, I need to start working on this again. But it's been at least a year (?) and that means re-reading it and that means cringe. Re-reading old prose is hard! :D Maybe worth it tho.