Fluttershy and Macintosh are the town sluts, and it's only because they're such private ponies that it took them so long to figure out what a good team they'd make.
I see your world building in this story leans on realism, usually in these kinds of fics stallions lean against the wall to urinate into the regular toilet (yup, that’s VERY important information!). But whatever you prefer.
'Realism' is probably the wrong word since I have a chart detailing torso lengths and erect penis lengths on various ponies and the later is often longer then the former, sometimes on the same pony (eg. Butterscotch), but I strive for attention to detail, I guess. Still procrastinating on the ponish conlang.
Now I'm wondering what Ponyville does with its sewage? We can presume, with the generally late 19th/early 20th tech level of the show, that they have indoor plumbing, but where is the sewage going? Do they have septic tanks? And if so, how do they drain them? Are they dumping it in the Canter River? That seems gross. Do unicorns magic it away to processing plants like fucking Harry Potter?
Wait I like that last one.
Anyway that's simply a public works issue; I will NOT be sexualizing that. I have a love-hate relationship with pee as it is.
You capture Big Mac's personality really well, and do a great job using other people to foil him off of and really help emphasize his personality. I really like the way you emphasize his size, too, not though just "he's big" but rather the way his size affects other ponies, and the area around him. That's really well done. Excellent work on how you describe the sex, too, the teasing leading up to it and the way that Big Mac and Caramel tease and interact with each other. I really love the sense of Caramel being completely overwhelmed, and the way you detail the passion of it all. You do a great job making it feel very erotic and sexy while keeping the pace really moving, so it doesn't feel messy or overdetailed, which I admire a lot.
Amazing work this chapter!
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I see your world building in this story leans on realism, usually in these kinds of fics stallions lean against the wall to urinate into the regular toilet (yup, that’s VERY important information!). But whatever you prefer.
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'Realism' is probably the wrong word since I have a chart detailing torso lengths and erect penis lengths on various ponies and the later is often longer then the former, sometimes on the same pony (eg. Butterscotch), but I strive for attention to detail, I guess. Still procrastinating on the ponish conlang.
Now I'm wondering what Ponyville does with its sewage? We can presume, with the generally late 19th/early 20th tech level of the show, that they have indoor plumbing, but where is the sewage going? Do they have septic tanks? And if so, how do they drain them? Are they dumping it in the Canter River? That seems gross. Do unicorns magic it away to processing plants like fucking Harry Potter?
Wait I like that last one.
Anyway that's simply a public works issue; I will NOT be sexualizing that. I have a love-hate relationship with pee as it is.
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You capture Big Mac's personality really well, and do a great job using other people to foil him off of and really help emphasize his personality. I really like the way you emphasize his size, too, not though just "he's big" but rather the way his size affects other ponies, and the area around him. That's really well done.
Excellent work on how you describe the sex, too, the teasing leading up to it and the way that Big Mac and Caramel tease and interact with each other. I really love the sense of Caramel being completely overwhelmed, and the way you detail the passion of it all. You do a great job making it feel very erotic and sexy while keeping the pace really moving, so it doesn't feel messy or overdetailed, which I admire a lot.